Comments on 'Run'"Wake-up sleeping beauty." someone whispered in my ear. When I opened my eyes I found Ty's eyes staring back into mine. They were so blue. I tryed to prop myself up but I realized my legs were wrapped around one of Ty's legs, one of my hands was on his pecs and my other hand was on his shoulder along with my head. Ty was really strong and I hadn't noticed until now because his shirt was off! Was it off when he fell asleep?
"What's going on?" I asked Ty. As my gaze shifted around the room I noticed Teddy and Mitch in a corner. I stood up and he finally replied "Umm I don't know. You were asleep so I decieded to wake you up." He said nicely.
"Well, what are Teddy and Mitch doing here?" I asked him.
"They're here?" He responded sounding suprized.
"Yes, they're in that corner"I said pointing to the corner. They stood up. I hadn't noticed til now but they had a video camera!
"Give me that!" I shouted. They ran and I chased after them.
"Linz! Wait!" Ty shouted, but I just kept running a tear fell from my eye.2007-09-27T01:58:16Zhttp://ficlets.com/feed/story/6560Comment on Run<p>And if the writer is young this gives them much time to become familiar with different writing styles and they will become more knowledgeable on what to add or leave out.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=145502007-09-27T01:58:16ZUser 5585http://ficlets.com/authors/user_5585Comment on Run<p>For some reason I get the feeling Ty really does know that the boys are in the corner I could be wrong but I feel the writer was going somewhere with that. I don’t think his shirt magically fell off either.What makes this story horrifying is the reality of the situation as I am sure this has happened to many girls.Granted this is not the best piece I have ever seen but it has potential</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=145492007-09-27T01:57:19ZUser 5585http://ficlets.com/authors/user_5585Comment on Run<p>Dear kneespun<br />I believe you have to look at this from a different perspective. There is something called reading between the lines and that is just what you may have to do with this piece. Read the next comment I will post</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=145482007-09-27T01:55:38ZUser 5585http://ficlets.com/authors/user_5585Comment on Run<p>i luv it. I do think you should put more about teddy being jealous though. I think it’s awesome.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=137922007-09-23T16:37:45ZUser 5239http://ficlets.com/authors/user_5239Comment on Run<p>i wanna have sexx with u hunny</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=130932007-09-19T21:57:45ZUser 5277http://ficlets.com/authors/user_5277Comment on Run<p>people really want to watch pornography or an actual movie. not people sleeping. and how did they get into the house? when she wakes up isn’t she going to be kind of curious as to what’s even going on? I don’t know how old you are but my 12 year old nephew writes better. You’d never get anything remotely close to this published ever.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=130772007-09-19T21:30:08Zkneespunhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kneespunComment on Run<p>this is a truly terrible piece of writing. as are the prequels and sequels. i’m not really trying to be mean but you have only a vague iea about your plot. your characters and the things that happen to them aren’t realistic at all. she walks him home and then falls asleep on his couch, somehow his shirt falls off and he wakes her up unaware that his friends are crouched in the corner videotaping them? and what kind of person wants to watch two people sleep anyway?</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=130762007-09-19T21:27:37Zkneespunhttp://ficlets.com/authors/kneespunComment on Run<p>Seems mean.</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=130022007-09-19T18:38:47ZAlexa ♥http://ficlets.com/authors/alexa1018Comment on Run<p>Oh my that is interesting!!!</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=121062007-09-14T19:45:51ZN555champ /\and/\ X-Ninja (LoA)http://ficlets.com/authors/bigkittyproductionsComment on Run<p> LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOOLOLOLOLOLOLOL thts sumthin my guy friends wuld do to me to – this is like, story of my life, except for the whole “ty” part.<br /> I LUVV IT !</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=93882007-08-31T16:22:56ZOne Time, One Chancehttp://ficlets.com/authors/one_chanceComment on Run<p>surprised, with an s. unless its on purpose. how extremely mortifying for Linz. :)</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=78742007-08-20T20:36:14Zblueyedwonderhttp://ficlets.com/authors/blueyedwonderComment on Run<p>omg, they videotaped it!! lol, Ty was kind of stupid how could he not notice them? lol</p>http://ficlets.com/stories/6560?basename=63562007-08-02T15:06:23ZPhosphate11http://ficlets.com/authors/phosphate11