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Glayelle

Laurielle nearly cried with relief.

Glayelle, I need you.

Maybe you should have realized that before you stole Adrastos…remember him? replied the tart voice.

Laurielle laughed bitterly.

I never stole him, we were never anything but friends.

I don’t believe you.

All right then, thought Laurielle, as proof that I’m not involved with any mermen, come help me save my man.

Man as in…human? asked Glayelle, sounding both shocked and curious.

Yes! Yes! cried Laurielle with relief. Quickly, she flashed pictures of the recent events through her head, leaving Glayelle only the smallest of seconds to see the Kraken.

The Kraken’s back?! said Glayelle with tangible fear in her thoughts.

Yes…long story, but I need you to come help save my boyfriend, Matt, and transform me back to a human state. Please help!, she begged.

“All right, all right, enough with the dramatic retelling,” said a voice from up on the dock, “By the way, very nice looking manfriend, or whatever they’re called.”

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Glayelle
Stovohobo
Posted 10 months ago

Ahhhh, the Kraken….very nice “manfriend/boyfriend” shpeal. I liked it, and all of these.
Glayelle
THX 0477
Posted 10 months ago

I appreciated the naming of the Kraken, and the dynamic is good, but I think I got a bit lost in the schpeal, just a tad too long…or I have a very short attention span.
Glayelle
SKermitgorf
Posted 10 months ago

mermaidmerman stories are fun to read and write, you did a good job, do mermaids/men speak in italics? j/k
Glayelle
Alexa ♥
Posted 10 months ago

I really liked it, but I thought that the schpeal was too long, and that the readers don’t need a re-hashing of events we just read about.
Glayelle
blueyedwonder
Posted 10 months ago

All right, sorry to all those who liked the spiel, as I cut it out, but I was getting critiqued about that, so I edited it.

Kermit—It was supposed to convey reading one another’s conscious thoughts. Did it work, or should I do some more editing?
Glayelle
Alexa ♥
Posted 10 months ago

Works better. I’ll give another star for your trouble.
Glayelle
blueyedwonder
Posted 10 months ago

well thank you! lol
Glayelle
Lone Writer
Posted 10 months ago

LOL . Manfriend. That’s funny. I like it.
Glayelle
NikkiC93
Posted 9 months ago

lol that last pary was like hilarious love i dont find a thing wrong with it ! : ]