Hmm. Very intriguing and thought-provoking. In the beginning, it’s just a little hard to follow, but then the word choice and the later parts make up for it. Great.

I think this is awesome. Really pulls you in and makes you want to know more. Kind of like a perfectly orchestrated movie trailer. But way more emotional and deep.

I really like how you alternate the stanzas – four long lines, four short lines – it keeps it from being too repetitive.