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Worse Things Than Murder

Mrs. Learella Kingston had spent three weeks holed up in a tiny filthy, putrid smelling, bathroom.
The walls were gritty and covered with graffiti. The constant dripping from the corroded faucet was in tune with the beating of her heart.

She was becoming claustrophobic. Breathing was difficult.

“Please pay the money and get me out of here,” she silently prayed.

She was wearing her pink bathrobe when she was abducted by three masked men while retrieving her morning paper .

The last meal she had was a bite of an onion bagel, she was beyond weak, and starving,with only rusty water to sustain her.

With the sleeve of her bathrobe Mrs. Kingston wiped a spot on the smeared mirror. She did not recognize the bedraggled reflection looking back at her.

A week ago she had hollered out for help and in answer a gruff voice called out, “Shut up in there, I’m tryin to watch the Phillies’ game.”

Afterward she was afraid to make a sound for fear the Phillies’ fan would come in and murder her, or worse.

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THX 0477
Posted 10 months ago

Yikes, I know I’m concerned.
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THX 0477
Posted 10 months ago

Also had to comment the pacing and tone are very fitting. Well done.
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Lone Writer
Posted 10 months ago

Hmm. Seems like the start of a good story…
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SKermitgorf
Posted 10 months ago

thanx, I prequeled it, hope you like the story of her abduction before her being thrown into the filthy bathroom.
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ItsNotEasy_BeingGreen
Posted 10 months ago

interesting…
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ItsNotEasy_BeingGreen
Posted 10 months ago

this is really good!
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Kiarra
Posted 10 months ago

that was great
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artistsrunwild
Posted 10 months ago

oooh i like this

i like the write the sequel then the prequel idea
makes things MUCH easier lol

all i want to know is – how could she still be alive without food after 3 weeks?! surely she would be beyond weak if the last meal she had was three weeks ago
and i’ll assume she’s drinking the water out of the sink to keep alive

just a few points to note
not to be nit picky or anything!!! lol
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SKermitgorf
Posted 10 months ago

I kinds forgot she’d need something to eat. hmmm.
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SKermitgorf
Posted 10 months ago

i took your suggestion and made her beyond weak. ty artistsrunwild!
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artistsrunwild
Posted 9 months ago

YEAH ! it sounds much better now and is practically scientifically correct

:)

i love the rusty water bit…perfect

now you get 5 stars :)
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artistsrunwild
Posted 9 months ago

ps – i like the new threads in your dp

lol
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SKermitgorf
Posted 9 months ago

No one noticed all the bad spelling.. (which I corected) I guess Laine P. Grey didnt read it. lol
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One Time, One Chance
Posted 9 months ago

hmmm something worse than murder? nicee =]
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blueyedwonder
Posted 9 months ago

very nice…and weird pic :$ but in a good way.
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Stovohobo
Posted 9 months ago

I like what you did with the picture, very nice. You’re getting better….