Drifting Melodies

by Stovohobo

The first time she had heard the song, she thought someone had turned the radio too loud. She had been on a bus, and bus driver must’ve decided to turn up the volume.

She got home, and found her house completely disheveled, clothes strewn everywhere. All manner of items lay like ragdolls, staring blankly and declaring their lifelessness.

The second time she heard the song, she was confused. To hear such an unusual song (if it could even be called that) more than once was odd. She was packed in with a mass of people on her street, and found it incredible that some radio reached that far.

The third time she heard the sound, her mind went into a sort of fog, lilting in and out of conciousness. She was alone in her bedroom. The song’s eerie melody drifted around her head, caressing her brain.

Finally, the song changed. Just barely, she heard a microscopic change in its composition. A voice.

Coming in behind you,
Watching from afar.
Coming in for you,
We are what you are.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

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    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted about 1 year ago

    Not uber scary, but I wanted to try something psychological…the imagination can be much scarier than movies or revealing writing.

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    blueyedwonder's Buddy Icon blueyedwonder

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    mhm…nice, nice…but what i really want to say…do you guys have RADIOS on the bus?? not fair, man, not fair.

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    JonasBrothersLova148's Buddy Icon JonasBrothersLova148

    Posted about 1 year ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    Some of ours do but mine doesnt

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    JonasBrothersLova148's Buddy Icon JonasBrothersLova148

    Posted about 1 year ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    Cool, sorry ‘bout the grade

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    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted about 1 year ago

    1. Most school buses (if that’s what you’re referring to) have radios built into the ceilings, at least all the ones I’ve been on. In this story, however, it’s a city bus. “She” is a woman, not a schoolgirl.

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    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I always appreciate the psychological, and this one definitely is suggestive of a few possibilities. Neat idea.

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    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Ominous how the song would follow her where ever she goes. It must have Otherworldly designs.

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    artistsrunwild's Buddy Icon artistsrunwild

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    oohh REALLY stovohobo

    way to scab my idea about integrating rhymes into your scary story

    kidding kidding this was great

    i agree with your own comment lol that its not uber scary but i like it – it plays with your mind and makes you imagine what that would be like if it were you

    what happened to her house though? or are you leaving it open ended – expectant for a win?!?! ;)

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    ItsNotEasy_BeingGreen's Buddy Icon ItsNotEasy_BeingGreen

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    creeeepy.

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    cainegreene's Buddy Icon cainegreene

    Posted 11 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    The part of the radio is not relevant. She hears this whether she wants to or not and thinks it is a broadcast song. Great job. True it is not Uber scary but hit us with a uber scary sequel

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