Concussion

by One Time, One Chance

Someone comes home, and I didn’t reconginize them, so I kicked them in the stomach with as much lust as a soccer striker could. The woman doubles over in pain, holding her stomach.

“What was that for?!” the stranger yells at me.

“Who are you?!” I yell right back

“I’m your mother, who do you think I am?!?”

“Your not my mother!”

The woman looks up at me, staring into my confused eyes. She obviously knows me, and I have a feeling I know her, but I’m pretty sure she’s not my mother.

She grabs my hand and drags me into her van.

“What are you doing?! Help!!” I scream but she’s shut the door and locked it. I look at the device with confusion, not knowing how to get out of it. All of the sudden, she’s sitting in the seat next to me and the car is moving.

I start yelling again, not knowing what was happening. The woman looks at me again, worriedly. We arrive at a big building that says “hostage all” as far as I could read.

Hours later, the woman’s told by a doctor:

“She has a concussion.”

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Concussion

    One Time, One Chance's Buddy Icon One Time, One Chance

    Posted about 1 year ago

    just for anybody who read my comment in the prequel – i don’t really have a concussion. the only thing in here thats non-fiction is that i’m really a soccer striker. the rest is fiction, as are most stories on ficlets =]

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    someday_93's Buddy Icon someday_93

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow…really like this. I thought at first the character was being kidnapped, though, but the last line made it all fall into place.

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    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    hostage all she saw, instead of hospital. she really did have a concussion.

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    YodaOnCrack's Buddy Icon YodaOnCrack

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I like the formatting, and there is some good dialog here.

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    JonasBrothersLova148's Buddy Icon JonasBrothersLova148

    Posted about 1 year ago

    One Time, One Chance,I think ur life is one big concussion.

    its ok
    shes my bff in real life

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