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Ocean

by User 5641

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Ocean

Feel the sand between your toes,
as the waves will crash and blow.
Very neat peaceful beach,
underneath your very feet.
Like a therapy,
the sounds sooth and calm,
just as you feel the sand in your palm.
You move in very slow motion,
as you look in awe at the beautiful ocean.

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Average Reader Rating: 3.5 stars out of 5

  1. Ocean

    emma jo_234's Buddy Icon emma jo_234

    Posted about 1 year ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    I like this, it’s a nice mental image, but sometimes it’s easier to say what you mean when you don’t try to rhyme. Just a tip. Nice effort.

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    One Time, One Chance's Buddy Icon One Time, One Chance

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    meh, i disagree with liveyourdream – i like the fact tht it rhymed, made it sound pretty cool =]

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