Dusty's Wedding, Conclusion

by Ana Cristina

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Dusty looked up and saw that the priest was looking at her intently, waiting for the reply. It was now or never. This felt like what it was like to stand on the diving board before you jumped into the deep end, only much, much worse. Because the fall she stood to take she might not ever get back up from again.

She cleared her throat, peered over at Tom. He looked afraid, his shoulders and jaw all tense, and it seemed comical to her suddenly. Because it was the first time she had ever seen him look this way, and she did not feel sympathy for him. Not in the slightest.

Something broke loose in her, threatening to take flight. Maybe this is what falling out of love felt like.

“No,” she said, and there was a collective gasp that rippled throughout the church. The priest blinked and repeated, “No?” like someone who couldn’t speak her language, didn’t understand what she was saying. “No,” she said again, liking the sound of it, how the word felt in her mouth. Maybe she was the one learning a new language.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

  1. Dusty's Wedding, Conclusion

    Officially's Buddy Icon Officially

    Posted 11 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    The story is good enough, but I don’t quite understand what lead her to say no. Simply the loss of a charm? All of her doubts? Earlier on the phone she’d seemed happy…So I think you should add more.

  2. Dusty's Wedding, Conclusion

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 11 months ago

    Thanks for the critique. I’ll try adding some more.

  3. Dusty's Wedding, Conclusion

    penguincaptain18's Buddy Icon penguincaptain18

    Posted 11 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    It’s good, but I agree with Officially. Why did she say no? Maybe its some negative quality of Tom? “Because for once she was in control” makes it seem as though he is very controlling or something like that. Hmm, can’t wait to see what happens next….

  4. Dusty's Wedding, Conclusion

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 11 months ago

    I’m learning that writing is never a “done” thing. Thanks for the comments. I hope you like this new (and hopefully) improved ending.

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