His Favorite Thing to Do

by Twisted Reality

Sunshine flooded in the room. I hate sunshine. It’s worse than darkness, burning your retinas, and imprinting sillouhettes in your vision. Ben liked it though. He told me once that he saw every sunrise. He wanted to see a newborn sun before he died, even if he never saw anthing else again. He never saw the sun that day. He didn’t see much of anything then. I did, though. I saw blood and shards of the glass that no longer sheltered us from the crisp, pre-dawn breeze. I saw Ben’s face, ghoslty pale, the white of his skin making his vividly blue eyes shine even brighter than usual. They searched my face before they closed forever. They looked for some kind of answer, some explanation for his premature fate. He glanced me over with that x-ray vision of his, for what seemed like forever. He made me wish it was me who was dying, whose breath was limited, and heartbeats numbered. The thing is, I was. I died, and I was gone from the world, but I wanted to come back. So I did. Without Ben.

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  1. His Favorite Thing to Do

    someday_93's Buddy Icon someday_93

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Gosh, this really makes me wonder what was happening…

  2. His Favorite Thing to Do

    OrangeOreos' Buddy Icon OrangeOreos

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That is amazing imagery…

    And why did he die?

    And what happened to Ben?

  3. His Favorite Thing to Do

    OrangeOreos' Buddy Icon OrangeOreos

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I sequeled.

    Hope you don’t mind!

    Your story and John Perkin’s challenge inspired me!

  4. His Favorite Thing to Do

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    This is very cool. No wonder it inspired OrangeOreos to write a sequel. I loved the line about Ben’s eyes searching your face before they closed forever. Well done.

  5. His Favorite Thing to Do

    invisibility_disability's Buddy Icon invisibility_disability

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Fantastic imagery. It also made me very sad… that shows a great ficlet, when it affects the reader’s emotions.
    Five stars!

  6. His Favorite Thing to Do

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 3 months ago

    yeah, fantastic imagery!

  7. His Favorite Thing to Do

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 3 months ago

    Beautifully described. Very sudden turn into the fantastic/fantasy at the end there.

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