Heavenly Procession

by J

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The starry night hangs above me. Trees surround me.

The procession of angels continues, streaking through the stars. The fire engulfs the mountains to the west of me.

From the other side, another procession of angels. They go to meet the first.

They clash.

Millions fall from the sky. Like a million specks of dust. Like a golden shower of rain, and I am engulfed in light.

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Average Reader Rating: 3.5 stars out of 5

  1. Heavenly Procession

    kwatz's Buddy Icon kwatz

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I like the imagery, but was jarred a bit by the change in verb tense (“millions just fell”; compared to the present tense used throughout) near the end. It seems stupid (especially since it was the inspiration line), but “millions fall” would up my rating.

    (I feel like I need to explain myself). :)

  2. Heavenly Procession

    J's Buddy Icon J

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Thanks. :)

  3. Heavenly Procession

    kwatz's Buddy Icon kwatz

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    There ya’ go!

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