Love is Strongest in its Departure

by Saint Chuck

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Through the still of the night I hear the sound of an approaching horse through the fog. I take the candle off of the bedstand and quietly walk to the kitchen. I look out the window and see a young man dismount from his horse and walk towards the back gate, just as he does whenever he comes. Gently I blow out the candle and move to the back parlor.

The young man waits by the gate until he sees a girl, my daughter. The embrace and she leads him inside. I wait until I hear her door shut. As I walk softly back down the hall, a gentle light flows under the doorway, and I hear hushed voices coming from her room.

In the morning, both the horse and its rider are nowhere to be seen. The only indication that they were ever there are the tears in my daughter’s eyes.

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  1. Love is Strongest in its Departure

    Laine P. Grey's Buddy Icon Laine P. Grey

    Posted 10 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I liked the imagery. Simply brilliant.

  2. Love is Strongest in its Departure

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 10 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Excellent. In your first paragraph, where you describe the young man dismount from his horse, you write “a young” and do not write the word man. If you don’t have enough character space, consider writing “a youth,” or simply “a boy/man,” that way it’s still gramatically correct.

  3. Love is Strongest in its Departure

    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted 10 months ago

    Noted and edited. Thanks.

    This is based on the poem “Willkommen und Abschied” by Johann Goethe, written in 1793.

  4. Love is Strongest in its Departure

    TreeBeard's Buddy Icon TreeBeard

    Posted 10 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very romantic.

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