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Prison Escape Plan [Stovohobo's 5 Word Challenge]

I shall begin my tale in medias res, then retrace and tell you how I got involved in the imbroglio.

Due to Stan’s avoirdupois , he couldn’t fit through the tunnel with the rest of the gang.

Our escape had been planned for weeks. Roger would loudly play the warden’s gramophone, Pavarotti, the volume cranked up, to hide the sounds of our digging.

Once outside the prison walls, we were to meet up with a man in a gray suit and a red boutonniere, it sounded so simple.

I never should have gotten involved with those hooligans. But the money sounded good, and the job was easy enough. Just attach a cowcatcher to my SUV , drive through the bank, grab the loot and skedaddle.

“Easy as pie,” Stan had said, he always thought of food.

Stan was rotund. During our getaway he was out of breath, Roger and I went back to try and drag him to my SUV ,cowcatcher still attached.
That’s when the Chicago PD showed up.

We were sentenced to twenty years.

And got another ten for trying to escape.

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Prison Escape Plan [Stovohobo's 5 Word Challenge]
THX 0477
Posted about 1 year ago

Missed the ‘d’ on sentenced, but otherwise a clever way to use all the words. Not the meaning of ‘avoirdupois’ I found, but could be right. These were some tricky words to use.
Prison Escape Plan [Stovohobo's 5 Word Challenge]
FourSeven
Posted about 1 year ago

Liked this. You can certainly do worse than Pavarotti as a distraction. I wish I would have been able to see him live, although I am probably just saying that because he’s dead. Also, if I were sentenced to thirty years, you’d better believe I’d keep trying to find new ways to escape. I mean, at that point, you have nothing to lose and it’s pretty exciting. It’s like a sport. At least, that’s the way I imagine it. Sometimes I wish I’d go to prison just so I could break out.
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Stovohobo
Posted about 1 year ago

Nice tone in this one. Just a few nit-picky things:
Well, this one isn’t nit-picky, really, but I should add “imbroglio” to my list of amazing words.
Okay, “avoirdupois weight” is a little redundant. “avoirdupois” is just fine in that sentence, I believe.
Other than that, there might just be a few sentence structures that seem different to me, but it’s probably just me.
Nice entry, anyway!
Prison Escape Plan [Stovohobo's 5 Word Challenge]
SupRspi
Posted about 1 year ago

Solid entry!

I liked the usage of the words, and like stovohobo, think that “imbroglio” is covered in awesome sauce.

I like that you used one of the words twice. The only nit I have t pick is that Stan’s “easy as pie” comment should have been past tense like the rest of the story.
Prison Escape Plan [Stovohobo's 5 Word Challenge]
someday_93
Posted about 1 year ago

Wow…and you even added in another word I didn’t understand…impressive.