I Can't Go In There

by Lone Writer

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John stared up at the Silo. I can’t go in there. he thought, vehemently. I can’t!
He turned his back on it like a child angry at their best friend. He stormed away. A few minutes later John came back. He sat on the ground in front of the Silo and crossed his arms.
“Why can’t you just leave me alone!?” he screamed.

Of course, there was no answer.

The tears began to stream down his face.
“Why did you take my mother from me?” he whispered.

No answer.

John put his head in his hands and cried the tears that hadn’t come the first time. He looked up at the Silo again.

“I can’t go in there.” he said again, this time aloud.

But John knew as well as anyone else that he had to.

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  1. I Can't Go In There

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    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    wow. excellent! i loved it. =)
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  2. I Can't Go In There

    Mike Kearney's Buddy Icon Mike Kearney

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Loved it! side note: I stupidly got over my fear of heights by climbing a rusty old grain silo years ago. This brings me back to sitting on the top looking down into the blackness of night.

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    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Nice, with lots of emotion. Kind of reminds me of one of my earlier ones, not that I’m claiming a copycat! Not at all, I think it’s just a testament to the inherent drama of the mother-child relationship and what that loss can create by way of internal and external conflict.

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