Train to Mexico

by Yeah Write!

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The driving force for which I persevered for days and would have for months was the glass porcupine. There were originally two, but, when my pawpaw died, he left one to my father and one to my uncle. These heirlooms were of great value, and it was my mission to reclaim the other before my greedy uncle realized their value. Now, I boarded the express train to Mexico, land of my ancestors (and my uncle), with my head and my hopes high.
“Hola. Me llamo Umble Fumble,” said the girl seated next to me, fiddling with a AA battery.
“Umble-fumble?”
“No. Uma-bell Fum-bla.” She corrected me, curling her lips in the strangest ways. Her accent was almost indescipherable, but, regardless of the hopelessness, I continued to flip through my many books of Spanish phrases until my fingers went numb.
“Nice to meet you… Umblefumble. And my name is Tucker.”
“Oh! Encantada!” answered Umblefumble. My fingers were once again put to work as I found the page, marked with a post-it note, that read “encantada—> enchanted.”

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Train to Mexico

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very nice attempt, with a layered and possibility suggesting ficlet out of one bizarre challenge. You get five stars just for managing that nice a story out of that odd challenge.

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    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Well done! the quest for the valuable glass porcupine was an awesome way to tell the story, given the words to choose from in the challenge. I applaud you.

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    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Well done! the quest for the valuable glass porcupine was an awesome way to tell the story, given the words to choose from in the challenge. I applaud you.

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    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very nice. Really didn’t expect to see sweetness here.Now I must re-think my writing strategy. (Maybe)

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    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow! This is good. My challenge was so weird but you made it into a story worthy of being it’s own ficlet. Congrats, and thanks for entering!!!

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    Hunting Beauty's Buddy Icon Hunting Beauty

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Awesome job! I found it quite interesting.

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    Quoth the Raven, "Nevermore"'s Buddy Icon Quoth the Raven, "Nevermore"

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That was really good! Nice job incorporating those!

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