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Christmas Ink {Kermitgorf Challenge}

“So ‘e just got it for me.”

“Really? He just bloody well got it for ya?”

“Yeah, right. I’d been telling ‘im I wanted one for a bit, droppin hints and stuff.”

“Like – just … got it for ya?”

“Yeah. How many times I ‘afta tell ya. He dinnit say anyfing, just got it for me.”

“Wow. I wish my fella was like that. I bin droppin ‘ints for weeks about that silver locket at Hampsteads – he jus’ always tells me we ain’t got the dosh to spare.”

“Yeah. Pretty nice innit? I dinnit even have to drop many hints. Just half-inched ‘is wallet and went and got it.”

“Nicked ‘is wallet? I thought you jus’ said he got it for ya?”

“Yeah, that what I said? I guess he did right? Maybe he dinnit know ‘e was, but ‘e did. And ‘sides, he’ll like it right?”

“Sure he’ll like it. I mean, what kind of fella wouldn’t want ‘is lady wearin somfing like that?”

“They spelled Chris’mas right dinnit they?”

“Yep. Good tattooers those lads. But I thought ‘is name was Curt, not Burt?”

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Christmas Ink {Kermitgorf Challenge}
SKermitgorf
Posted 8 months ago

OMG now that IS Funny! Loved the Cockney type accent.
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SupRspi
Posted 8 months ago

And somehow I didn’t manage to use the word “innit”. I’m strangely proud of myself.

Dialogue is about my favourite thing to write – so I really liked this challenge – although the making it funny part was hard. I guess I could have written another passage about my murdered clown from a previous challenge.

Very glad you liked it Kermitgorf.
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Jenunique
Posted 8 months ago

So funny. I love the last line!
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Tiggerstripn2
Posted 8 months ago

funny! see if i spell stuff like that fifteen people tell me i spelt it wrong (spelled)
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someday_93
Posted 8 months ago

Haha, oh my god, that’s hysterical. I love the accent…and the last line was amazing.
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.:band baby:.
Posted 8 months ago

I really loved the last line. very funny!
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SupRspi
Posted 8 months ago

With the help of a friend of mine (British friend no less!) I edited and rewrote some of the dialogue.

Let me know how you like the new version, and if you read the old one, how you find the changes.
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SupRspi
Posted 8 months ago

Oops. One “innit” crept in. Ah well, I’ll deal.
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Tiggerstripn2
Posted 8 months ago

Yep that did it you know I think it’s good.
It was funny to start with.
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Lone Writer
Posted 7 months ago

LOL ! That’s hilarious!!!
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One Time, One Chance
Posted 7 months ago

i don’t get it, but even though i don’t, i still like the last line – hilarity!
nice job!=]
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Tarmaie
Posted 7 months ago

I’m not claiming to be an expert in this area, but the language sounded a bit off to me. Like it was forced or something, words didn’t seem to fit… I don’t know. That’s not to say I didn’t like it, cause I did really quite like it. And I’m really glad you attempted an accent at all that seemed totally random to me. Anyhooser, well done.