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Mice In The Leaves

by Tad Winslow

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I crunch my way through pine cones and sticks—feeling

conspicuous in what seems to be complete isolation. Just

walking and emptying my mind of the toxic smallness that

clutters my life. 

No plans. No cell phone. No blinking advertisements that

demand attention. No details that dillute the meaning in

the world and myself.

The satisfaction of freedom fills my

solitary walk with joy until I start to sense a presence.

Hidden all around me they breathe short puffs and watch me.

Soundless. They are as alive as wide eyes allow. My foot

collapses leaves as big as their bodies. The instict to

survive motivates a few to scuttle beyond detection.

I cannot see them but I feel the wonder in their hidden eyes—

the fear that hushes them is all I need to feel alive.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Mice In The Leaves

    Kermitgorf's Buddy Icon Kermitgorf

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    emptying my mind of the toxic smallness that
    clutters my life. > awesome line as was the whole ficlet, your character feels bigger powerful and alive when the mice scurry, like they are insignificent compared to him.

  2. Mice In The Leaves

    Rowan Mayfair's Buddy Icon Rowan Mayfair

    Posted about 1 year ago

    this kind of gave me that creepy “is someone there” feeling. nice job I’m wondering what happens when mice attack!!

  3. Mice In The Leaves

    wytherwings' Buddy Icon wytherwings

    Posted 12 months ago

    wow thats really good. its really descripive, i can picture it clearly
    makes me wat to kno more…

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