the snow

by skylar

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It was snowing and it was snowing hard. It wasnt like one of those planned all week snowstorms it was a spur of the moment one. Like mother nature just decided like my mom just dedided moments before what house where going to live in or what state. You cant do that you need to tell people warn people not take them out of school the day you are moving. It just isnt right. I needed to get home i couldnt feel my toes they were numb. Chaya wasnt helping she kept holding on to my arm and dragging me down. The down part of having a 6 year old sister. We were somwhere around a nhiborhood. We just moved inand started school yeaterday so we didnt know exactly where we lived. We were going to freeze or even worse die . Shut up may I told myaself. Stupid name also . It is short for maybaline.Also a stupid name. I like it but it is just well my mom picked it out out of a magizine while she was filling out the birth certificate. May can we please go home i cant breathe that well. Oh no a thought just came to me ..

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Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

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    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted 9 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I’m liking some of the emotion I did get through in this piece. The only problem I had was with the reading of it itself. Spelling and punctuation seem to drag it down a little (I know I sound like an English teacher, but this is a writing website) and it would’ve been a lot easier to read had those things been adjusted. Hope that wasn’t too harsh, but I really do like the direction this is going. The descriptions and such are good.

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    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 9 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I feel sorry for them, it’s like they’ve been abandoned.

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