One Moment Can Make You Think.

by butterflygirl6106

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It was raining very hard and the wind litterally was blowing rapidly and hard. I sat in my car hoping it would stop. I noticed the man on the cornner trying to keep his umberlla from blowing away and hurring to the other side of the building. It’s funny how rain can put fear in people. The rain pounded down on the hood of my care as if someone was banging on it. I kept the music on while I waited. I never took notice of people until now, I kept asking my self what were their lives like and where have they been. Listening to the rain continue to pour was relaxing it kinda made you think about alot of things. Oh wow! isn’t that sweet, he is hugging her so close to keep her under the umbrella. I wish I had someone nice. I quickly went on to something else, the rain can bring back alot of memories. The drops just bring you to a place, oh great it’s slowing down, I can get out and go into the hospital now, for a moment the rain kept me from thinking of why I was here. I will be ok, I heard it in the rain drops.

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Comments

  1. One Moment Can Make You Think.

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 9 months ago

    good story, lots of spelling mistakes, but still understandable.

  2. One Moment Can Make You Think.

    kespat's Buddy Icon kespat

    Posted 9 months ago

    I’m sorry. This is going to sound really harsh, but you have no business attempting to create a story until you get a great deal more knowledge and some talent. Your writing is flat. You have numerous misspellings or typos. I don’t care about the characters and you appear incapable of original thought. The only reason I’m continuing to read this is to see just how bad it gets. You can tell yourself that your inability to spell (or proofread) is about being creative, but really it makes you seem uneducated.

  3. One Moment Can Make You Think.

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 9 months ago

    concept of the story has potential, needs work on paragraph separation and spelling

  4. One Moment Can Make You Think.

    blackbearsrock's Buddy Icon blackbearsrock

    Posted 9 months ago

    well I thought it was good and don’t worry about the spelling

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