A night at home (vamp. challenge)

by Blossom Ruoqen

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“The sweetness was turned to adamantine, heartless cruelty, and the purity to voluptuous wantonness.”
Kristine shivered as the movie came to a climax, clutching her bugle bag tightly to her heaving chest.

The house was empty: parents out on a dinner date, brother at a friend’s for the night. It was just her, Dracula, a dark comforter enveloping her rigid body, and her bag of junk food. Crunch ohh, bugles were good.

Another bag of bugles later…
“My revenge has just begun! I spread it over centuries and time is on my side.”
By now, the only reason Kristine was still eating was to give her mouth something to do other than squealing every few minutes.

The moon rose steadily in the sky and, her parents still weren’t home. Shadows played along the bare living room walls as Dracula ended, “Bugle fat be gone!” she chanted while marching upstairs. On her way up she glanced her parent’s car parked in the driveway, with three figures inside. Two stayed inert, and 1 looked up at her. Shadows tattooing his red eyes

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. A night at home (vamp. challenge)

    Blossom Ruoqen's Buddy Icon Blossom Ruoqen

    Posted 7 months ago

    Anyone care to sequel it?

  2. A night at home (vamp. challenge)

    Laine P. Grey's Buddy Icon Laine P. Grey

    Posted 7 months ago

    Nice, it took me a while to figure out that you meant Bugles. A rather slow start.

  3. A night at home (vamp. challenge)

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 7 months ago

    I love Bugles. And this is a great story. I give you 5 stars just for the Bugle reference. ;) You know, the first time I watched Dracula, I was in my twenties, and it scared the holy crap outta me! I couldn’t go into my bathroom without opening the shower curtain to be sure the tall Nosferatu wasn’t going to peek out over the top of the curtain. :0

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    Crown Me Tarzan, King of Mars' Buddy Icon Crown Me Tarzan, King of Mars

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Which Dracula? The superior 1930’s Tod Browning/Bela Lugosi version, the 1960’s Christopher Lee, the underrated 1970’s Frank Langella, the made-for-TV Jack Palance or the disappointing 1990’s Francis Ford Coppola edition?

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    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I thought it was great. I was going to go with 5 stars just for the cute picture of an adolescent night alone, sort of a snapshot of life. Then, BAM , twist ending. You got me on that one.

    And the number of versions of the tale certainly speak to the resonating power of the vampire fable. And you think you caught a bit of that in this with the ability of the vampire character to rapidly turn the mundane into the horrific.

    LoA

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    Blossom Ruoqen's Buddy Icon Blossom Ruoqen

    Posted 7 months ago

    It would have to be either the 1930’s version or the 1960’s version. To tell you the truth I didn’t give that much thought while writing it, so thank you for bringing that out mr. Tarzan

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    Crown Me Tarzan, King of Mars' Buddy Icon Crown Me Tarzan, King of Mars

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I don’t know why I thought that was so important to know which Dracula movie, other than I think it gives some insight into what kind of person the character is: if it’s a teenage girl at home watching the 1930’s Dracula, I would think she’s a movie buff. If it’s the 70’s version with the ever-so-dreamy Frank Langella, she’s a romantic. If it’s the made-for-TV with Jack Palance, she’s just weird.
    : )
    Good job, by the way.

  8. A night at home (vamp. challenge)

    Blossom Ruoqen's Buddy Icon Blossom Ruoqen

    Posted 7 months ago

    she’s more of a movie buff. nerdy in her own way :)

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    Tad Winslow's Buddy Icon Tad Winslow

    Posted 7 months ago

    the decription of the Vampire was good at the end and the fact that she was alone in the house made the story eerie before anything scary even happened.

  10. A night at home (vamp. challenge)

    Brebelles' Buddy Icon Brebelles

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    ooooh!!!!!!
    I like this alot, it DID have a twist ending, lol.
    Great Read!! SOMEONE SEQUEL IT . I would but I’d prolly ruin it, lol. Good Job anywhowayz!
    -Bri-on!!

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