Never Marry (Phosphate11's Challenge)

by SocccerISmyLIFE

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The scene takes place in the apartment of Susan Stringwald. The window is open and the dog is barking obnoxiously. A storm rages outside. Its smells like T.V. dinner. It’s dark and late. Steven, her fiance, walks in with a gun in hand. Fade in.

Susan: Steven what’s going on?
Steven: I have too! It’s what I have to do!

Steven holds gun out and points it at Susan.

Susan: Baby! It’s okay…. you don’t have to do this!

Susan begans to sob and Steven slowly points the gun away from her and toward himself.

Steven: I have to! It’s not up to you Susan! I love you but, you don’t deserve scum like me!
Susan: Steven NO!!! I love you! Don’t do this to me! I need you!
Steven: I must….you’ll be better off anyway!

Storm continunes to rage, dog to bark and Susan to sob.

Susan: NO!! Steeeven!

Steven takes gun, holds away from himself and pulls the trigger. The gun booms but, all you hear is the screams and sobs of a women who will probably never get married. Fade out.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. Never Marry (Phosphate11's Challenge)

    SocccerISmyLIFE's Buddy Icon SocccerISmyLIFE

    Posted 11 months ago

    I have never even seen a screen play before but I tried! I’m ssorry if it sucks. Take pity on me please! :)

  2. Never Marry (Phosphate11's Challenge)

    Phosphate11's Buddy Icon Phosphate11

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This is a very well done screen play.
    5 stars.

  3. Never Marry (Phosphate11's Challenge)

    Fyora Cartagan's Buddy Icon Fyora Cartagan

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Yes, I agree with Phosphate11.

  4. Never Marry (Phosphate11's Challenge)

    JohnnysGiRL's Buddy Icon JohnnysGiRL

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I agree too! It is so good! It is intense in a good way though!

  5. Never Marry (Phosphate11's Challenge)

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    Posted 11 months ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    It’s intense, but you don’t really feel for the characters so much. Well, I didn’t, at least. It would have been better if you knew the characters, and liked them.

  6. Never Marry (Phosphate11's Challenge)

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    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Iiked it, very intense…

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