She should have known it was a trap, but she was desperate. Her kid hadn’t had a new pair of shoes for seven months, and she had no money. The dancing wasn’t enough. She had resorted to the only other thing she could do reliably: prostitution. Of course there were some bad people, but she needed the money so badly. So she had let the man in the suit lead her into the back room of some grimy dump of a strip joint. “So, mister, it’s $100 for the first half hour, 50 up front. You up for it?” “Oh, dolly, I won’t be that long.” He swept her up into a lustful embrace. She didn’t notice the knife until it was halfway in her lower back. A whisper in her ear of “Thanks, baby. That’s all the release I needed”. A fifty dollar bill floating to the ground. A slowly spreading pool of red, warm stickiness beneath her. The last thing she ever heard was the song “Mister Sandman” as her world faded to nothingness.
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About the author
Tears of Phoenix
Boston, MA
The Most Random Day Ever (A Ficlet Fantasy)
Previously Wings Of Phoenix
Woohoo! Someone actually sequeled my work! It’s here: http://ficlets.com/stories/29338 and it’s also my homepage. It’s amazing. You should totally read it.
Feel free to critique me however you wish. I find direct critique much more useful than the “Oh I loved it, the only problem was your story” kind of thing. Disclaimer: You can tell me my story sucks all you like, but please tell me WHY it sucked. That way I’ll know what to fix.
I tend to write only when I have strong emotion. I find the works produced in fits of indifference or just “okay” moods to be pretty boring and forced. I try to avoid overused and tired lines but sometimes I can’t help it. My works are usually depressing, but I’m generally not sad. I just tend to write to not feel that way (kinda like transferring the sad to the words and then feeling better cause it’s in print and not in me. Does that make sense?)
Fun Descriptions!
“Smells Like Ghosts”.
“She entered the bar one hip at a time”.
“He had an aura of danger about him. Not the ‘Oh, how cool is he?’ kind of danger, but the ‘One step closer and you will be missing a body part’ kind of danger”.
“Slightly crazy. Hint of nuts and cinnamon?”.
I like Stovohobo’s work a lot. Also, Ana Cristina has fabulous work, as well as THX 0477. I like to make people think.
I’ve joined the League of Awesomeness! I’m now the Awesomeness Consultant! (For more info visit http://ficlets.com/authors/thx_0477)
Published on December 09, 2007.
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