In a Corner Room

by Bag of Sand

The moment was beautiful, at least.

Her body was dark as framed by the fire place behind her. The fire flicked and popped at her shapely form, her dress full of polka dots, her hair dark, her lips red. She didn’t see him as he reached from behind, grabbed her and pulled her lips to his. Her involuntary ghasp only made the moment more pleasant.

She yielded, as only a woman in a moment can, and music from the revelers in the other room reached a fever pitch in line with the pressure of their mouths. The held on and on, savoring, unbreaking, until the moment of eventual release and the accompanying ache that followed.

She needed to be kissed. He had kissed her. She needed romance and he had provided. She craved specificity, something to hold onto during lonely nights, and he, seeing a moment, had seized it.

She needed the fantastic. He wanted a story.

She fell in love. By the time they left the room, her face already made him want to vomit.

Comments

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  1. In a Corner Room

    Melia's Buddy Icon Melia

    Posted 10 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Fantastic description with a whiplash ending. Loved it!

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    Culture Shock w/ Mike Schwartz's Buddy Icon Culture Shock w/ Mike Schwartz

    Posted 10 months ago

    Wow that’s so poetic without even being written in prose. I’m in awe.

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    pie_is_good's Buddy Icon pie_is_good

    Posted 10 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love the description of a love story all the way through, and the last line…wow. Good job, definitely my favorite sort of ficlet.

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