A Haven for the Hopeless (Alliteration Challenge)

by Batak Beatrix

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He carefully crawled into the vestibule of the venerable church as the silent saints watched with sad eyes. His sins had surreptitiously sucked at his soul, searing a hole that brightly burned with the fiendish fires of garroting guilt. The vestiges of a vindictive vendetta, passed to him vicariously by the virtue of a vilifying vow, seeming so stupidly silly now with the bright blood of various victims staining his hands here in these hallowed halls.

Candles burned brightly, a beacon to which he desperately dragged his beaten beleaguered body. Tears trailing down his tanned and torn visage, he felt vulnerable in the face of the vestal Virgin guarding the flickering flames. He knelt, bowing his head before her beatific beauty. Could she grant him benediction for the bevy of lives he had so viciously vivisected?

Bells boomed from the belfry, a balm to his broken soul. They spoke of salvation, soothing his sadness for a short second.

Offering his harrowed heart to the heavens, he prayed for peace.

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  1. A Haven for the Hopeless (Alliteration Challenge)

    Howie Amourscow's Buddy Icon Howie Amourscow

    Posted 9 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Carefully-chosen and well-written words once again grace our eager eyes. Thank you for another fabulous ficlet.

  2. A Haven for the Hopeless (Alliteration Challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 9 months ago

    Wow, gut wrenching even amidst the mulititude of bon mots. And you managed to slip in vivisect, so kudos on the big vocabulary word usage there. I give this one my vote as a winner.
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  3. A Haven for the Hopeless (Alliteration Challenge)

    Blossom Ruoqen's Buddy Icon Blossom Ruoqen

    Posted 9 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I like big words, a lot… :D

    A wonderful take on the sins we all acquire over time. Terribly terrific and heartrendingly hypnotic.
    Your choice of words make for an enrapturing ficlet!

  4. A Haven for the Hopeless (Alliteration Challenge)

    uselessness' Buddy Icon uselessness

    Posted 9 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Excellent writing, loaded with evocative descriptors! The “V” passages gave me V for Vendetta flashbacks.
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