Messa'

by butterflygirl6106

“Danny come back, its not safe. ” The flash light seem to disappear the more Danny walked into the cave. Jeremy thought for a second he saw a shadow climb across the rock on the other side of the pool of water.

“Jeremy, this is great, its going deeper and deeper as if walking down a hole.”

” I know Danny, that is what scares me, we will never find our way out of here.”

They were not alone, they did not understand that hiding deep within the cave was a creature only known to story tellers as Messa”. A wolf like creature that walked on two feet and had a thorny spine that could change formation when attack.

“Danny, what is that smell?” Jeremy look behind him and there was a river of opaque slim flowing through the tunnels.

” Did you here that Jeremy?” There was noise comming from the bottom of a pit that had steam rising to the top of the hole where they were standing.

Just then the hatching of Messa could be heard all over the cave and they were determine to find this mystical beast so many..

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 3.0 stars out of 5

  1. Messa'

    Bigkittyproductions' Buddy Icon Bigkittyproductions

    Posted 7 months ago

    cool…some parts were a little badly written though

  2. Messa'

    Emotes' Buddy Icon Emotes

    Posted 7 months ago

    yah i agree..but otherwise..nice story

  3. Messa'

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 7 months ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    A neat story idea. Just a thought, but contractions and even slang or abbreviated words can make dialog feel more natural, especially with apparently youthful or foolish characters.
    LoA

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