64 Characters

by THX 0477

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Dan, the field mouse, strode confidently into the meadow saying, “We challenge you, for the pride of our fathers, for the sake of our dignity, and the right to this meadow!”
“What, jutht the 20 of you?” sneered Henry, a vole with a limp and a slight lisp.
“Nu-uh, We’ve got 29,” corrected Dan.
Henry counted, “I thee you, 8 mithe, 4 hedgehogth, 2 owlth, and half dozen thickly kittenth.”
Dan boasted, “Ah, but you’re not counting the 9 lemmings.”
“Lemmings don’t count,” mocked Phil, a spunky sparrow.
“We do so!” called one of the lemmings.
Henry sighed in a condescending way, “Even with the lemmingth, we have you outnumbered.”
“Not by much,” Dan tried, “half your number are feather weights.”
“I, and my 11 fellow sparrows take exception to that remark,” Phil said hotly.
“As do the larks, all 5 of us,” trilled Nancy, obviously, a lark.
“Numberth athide, we have 2 badgerth,” Henry added.
“You and your badgers,” Dan huffed.
“Hey, it’th not like we need the badgerth with 14 angry chipmunkth on our thide!”

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. 64 Characters

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 8 months ago

    Oh wait, is that not what you meant by “64 Characters”? Well, I at least hope it was “creative and imaginative.” Ha, stump the LoA? Ha.

  2. 64 Characters

    [pens&feathers]'s Buddy Icon [pens&feathers]

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Hahaha. Quite a creative interpretation of the challenge. Made me smile.

  3. 64 Characters

    Hobo Beard Bob's Buddy Icon Hobo Beard Bob

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Nice Job. You are the winner… Of what? I have no idea!

  4. 64 Characters

    Culture Shock w/ Mike Schwartz's Buddy Icon Culture Shock w/ Mike Schwartz

    Posted 8 months ago

    That’s pretty wicked. Not gonna lie.

  5. 64 Characters

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I LOVE it!!! All 65 of you! You, being the best character of all! A gathillion tharth for you! ;) Or the 5 which I am allowed to click. :/

  6. 64 Characters

    Algai 'd' Aman's Buddy Icon Algai 'd' Aman

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    HA! OK OK That was a freaking awesome display of the 64 character limit.

    BTW , (and don’t tell anyone ;) Even after having read your profile before making the ‘Stumped’ comment, and having visited the site, I had it set in my mind that your title was ‘Lord of Awesomeness’ hence LoA, not even stopping to think about what LoA really meant.

    But it looks like you proved me wrong, and no, it looks like the LoA can indeed not be stumped lol

  7. 64 Characters

    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted 8 months ago

    Amathing.

  8. 64 Characters

    zkid's Buddy Icon zkid

    Posted 8 months ago

    I can only count 63 characters.

  9. 64 Characters

    Dr. Mousse's Buddy Icon Dr. Mousse

    Posted 8 months ago

    Lol. That’s a pretty hilarious interpretation. Nice job. You made me laugh!
    LoA

  10. 64 Characters

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 8 months ago

    zkid is right. Boy do I feel sheepish. But, correction made so now there are 64.

  11. 64 Characters

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    lot of funny animal creature characters..

  12. 64 Characters

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    lot of funny animal creature characters..

  13. 64 Characters

    zkid's Buddy Icon zkid

    Posted 8 months ago

    If there are now 8 mice, shouldn’t Dan be claiming to have 30, not 29? Or does he not count himself?

  14. 64 Characters

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 8 months ago

    Let’s just figure that Dan, in the heat of the moment, did not get the math right. And we’ll just leave it as it is, an absurd little story.

  15. 64 Characters

    emma jo_234's Buddy Icon emma jo_234

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Hahahahahahahahahaha I love how they talk…I laughed out loud. Thith ith a great thtory. And you certainly do fit within the “creative and imaginative” parameters.

  16. 64 Characters

    Sailor Emo's Buddy Icon Sailor Emo

    Posted 8 months ago

    Ack! WIsh I would’ve thought of that!

  17. 64 Characters

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 8 months ago

    Genius! You rebel! Nice job LoA!

  18. 64 Characters

    zkid's Buddy Icon zkid

    Posted 8 months ago

    Sorry to be so picky. I have a ‘thing’ about numbers. I really do love this little story, it’s a very imaginative take on the challenge.

  19. 64 Characters

    Dragon_sun 515's Buddy Icon Dragon_sun 515

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Brilliant!
    As a writer you have to explore all possibilities.
    And be different.

  20. 64 Characters

    RunningWithScissors' Buddy Icon RunningWithScissors

    Posted 8 months ago

    bahahahah.
    smarty pants. :]

  21. 64 Characters

    Tad Winslow's Buddy Icon Tad Winslow

    Posted 8 months ago

    yeah, but those feather weights can strike quick and often on thee cumbersome lumbering heavies. Lol. Loved it!
    lone awesombre

  22. 64 Characters

    Cat the Dancing Mouse's Buddy Icon Cat the Dancing Mouse

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Woah…I get it now. LOL that took a while.
    Nice job! I love your thinking outside the box.
    Cheers, Cat the Dancing Mouse

  23. 64 Characters

    The Dod's Buddy Icon The Dod

    Posted 8 months ago

    You got a head count. Not real characters. Just nameless, faceless masses. I’m not sure this story qualifies

  24. 64 Characters

    Tarmaie's Buddy Icon Tarmaie

    Posted 7 months ago

    Maybe I’m psychic but right before I got to reading this entry I started thinking what if someone did this.

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