Who is Him?

by Officially

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Tim stares at screen for quite some time, then back at his sleeping love.

Told him what?

Time tries to tell himself that it couldn’t be anything bad. After all, Jill had accepted his proposal to marry him.

And, after all, the message may not even be alluding to him at all. It could be some other “him.” Someone she worked with, perhaps.

Still, a part of him is scared. What if the “him” in question was him, Tim? And what if it is something bad?

It had, after all, been six months. Maybe Jillian had been planning to break up the first time that she’d seen him.

But no, then she wouldn’t have said yes, would she have?

Tim isn’t sure how much time has passed as he has stared at the glowing screen of her cell phone. It feels like an eternity.

Knowing that, perhaps, it isn’t the right thing to do, but unable to stop himself anyway, Tim hits a button on her phone. Reply.

The phone makes a beep, and he jumps.

But it is too late to stop, so he sends a message.

Told him what?

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Who is Him?

    Cat the Dancing Mouse's Buddy Icon Cat the Dancing Mouse

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Oooo nice sequel! Really captures what THX wrote. Nice job, 5 stars.

  2. Who is Him?

    emma jo_234's Buddy Icon emma jo_234

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Yeah….told him WHAT ???? Sequel!!

  3. Who is Him?

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 6 months ago

    Love the capturing of a moment, a whole ficlet on what probably took no more than a minute, but a minute that felt that long for our main character. Delightful, and the ending certainly presents a lot of possibilities. Will the person respond? How will they respond? When will they respond?
    LoA

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    Cat the Dancing Mouse's Buddy Icon Cat the Dancing Mouse

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Well…We saw how User 7268 Took it…Now could we see how you wanted to end it?
    xox—Cat the Dancing Mouse

  5. Who is Him?

    RunningWithScissors' Buddy Icon RunningWithScissors

    Posted 6 months ago

    nuaghty naughty!
    curiosity killed the catt. :p

  6. Who is Him?

    emma jo_234's Buddy Icon emma jo_234

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Hey, is this series going to be continued? Because if anyone read the sequel to this, they’ll know that it ended a bit…abruptly. And I really wanted to know what happened. :((

  7. Who is Him?

    Officially's Buddy Icon Officially

    Posted 5 months ago

    Well I’d kind of like to let the original author of the series, Celestic23, go from here, so I don’t take the story somewhere she doesn’t want it to go. If she’s ok with it, though, I’ll continue.

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