Creatures

by Saint Chuck

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James’s large frightened eyes traveled slowly around the room. The creatures, some sitting on chairs, others reclining on a sofa, were all watching him intently. They didn’t seem too malicious, but then again, you can never be too sure, James thought to himself.

He got up and walked to the other side of the room, to see what the creatures would do. All eyes followed him, but the creatures had yet to make a sound. He walked over towards the fire place and picked up the poker lying in the ashes. Slowly he reached out and gently poked one of the creatures closest to him. To his amazement, it giggled. He poked it again, only a bit harder. It giggled again. With a bit of uncertainty, he took aim and whacked the creature against the head. It flew across the room and landed against the bookshelf with a loud thud.

James examined the little creature, taking it for for dead. He poked it once more. Now, instead of a giggle, the creature outright laughed at him.

“What are you?!” James screamed in exasperation.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Creatures

    Melia's Buddy Icon Melia

    Posted 7 months ago

    Fascinating to see the directions everyone takes the same starter :) Great job!

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    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I was just gonna say what Melia said. Everyone seems to like this one, and yet all of them are so dang different! Heck, that’s why I made the non-challenge.

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    BernerOberland's Buddy Icon BernerOberland

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    the creatures giggled.. so did I reading it. LoA

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    Tad Winslow's Buddy Icon Tad Winslow

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Absolutely bazaar. I had the feeling that I was writing this story with you as I read, it was like you didn’t know what to make the characters do and I often feel that way when I’m writing or imagining a scene.

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    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted 7 months ago

    Now is that a good thing or a bad thing? Now it’s absolutely true of course. I just sat down and started writing with no plan in mind. But I’ve always considered bizzare as a compliment ^^

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    Tad Winslow's Buddy Icon Tad Winslow

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    It’s a good thing. Originality is very important to me, and bazaar can fall in that category, at least it did concerning this ficlet of yours. Calvin and Hobbes was pretty bizarre too sometimes. lol wrong bazaar, bizarre I mean of course—I’m sure you didn’t think I meant your story was a strip of makeshift shops in the middle east.

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