The Park, part 2 [Place Challenge]

by Ana Cristina

He was someone who seemed to exist only in my yearbooks. Just another stow-away in my teenage memories.

One night in college, we decided to visit this park. I remember it was cold that night, but my goose-flesh was due not to the weather but to my nerves. I sensed that something was about to happen, in the way that our bodies sometimes know us better than our minds do. I remember, too, the silence of that night, the only sound our hushed voices. Our breaths rose up like smoke, veiling the star-patterned velvet of the sky.

Both of us sat in the swing-set, sharing a bottle of Merlot, sharing stories. The taste of wine in my mouth, both bitter and sweet. The taste of his kiss earthy, elemental. The incredulity of that moment filling my head – impossible, that this boy who had never meant much to me before could suddenly mean everything.

There is so much I forget about that night, so much I wish I could remember. But forgetting is inevitable, and love helps fill in the gaps that exist in our memories.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. The Park, part 2 [Place Challenge]

    heartbeats echocho's Buddy Icon heartbeats echocho

    Posted 8 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Beautiful…the way you describe it…it’s…awwww. : ) sequel please!

  2. The Park, part 2 [Place Challenge]

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 8 months ago

    The sequel is my present tense, actually. This happened eight years ago on December 3, 1999. Still going strong. :-) Thanks for the comment.

  3. The Park, part 2 [Place Challenge]

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 8 months ago

    Wonderful job! I like the second paragragh; how it builds anticipation and how I almost felt goose-pimply too. I was elated to read that you kissed and happy that you entered this challenge with such a heartwarming tale.

  4. The Park, part 2 [Place Challenge]

    Storykeeper of Fae's Buddy Icon Storykeeper of Fae

    Posted 8 months ago

    So romantic and absolutely beautiful. I’d give you 11 stars if I could!
    LoA

  5. The Park, part 2 [Place Challenge]

    artistsrunwild's Buddy Icon artistsrunwild

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    A wonderful sentiment. Proof that true love does exist. How lovely. :)

  6. The Park, part 2 [Place Challenge]

    Yuli-Fo-Fuli's Buddy Icon Yuli-Fo-Fuli

    Posted 8 months ago

    It makes me want to fall in love all over again =]

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