The Betrayer Speaks

by Stoner

“I’m looking for the betrayer Marcus,” Angelo said. The soft glow of a cigarette was the only indication of a presence in the shadows.
“What do you want with me?” replied a voice that sounded like gravel tumbling in a steel drum.
“I was told you survived the Death Squads. I was told you know something of their weakness.” Angelo stood up a little straighter, pushed his chest out a bit further.
“You are a fool. A heroic fool looking for glory where only death awaits.” He paused, crushed out his cigarette and lit a fresh one. “What do I care. Your death won’t be on my head, but know this, the Death Squads don’t kill any more. I was merely the first victim of their new power.”
Angelo took a step back, “And what power is that, betrayer?”
“They rip your soul from your body, turning you into an empty shell to waste away.” Marcus shuffled forward, slowly emerging from the shadows. His skin like dried, cracked earth, eyes deeply recessed, a stench of rotting flesh so thick it was almost visible to the naked eye.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. The Betrayer Speaks

    Kevin Lawver's Buddy Icon Kevin Lawver

    Posted 7 months ago

    Wow. You picked a killer photo. He looks like the Grim Reaper in burlap. And a great story to boot!

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    Fyora Cartagan's Buddy Icon Fyora Cartagan

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That really does fit the picture, and gives it some GREAT back story for someone else (or yourself) to work with.

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    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 7 months ago

    Scary. It is a great back story, the “power”, the disfiguring, the name Betrayer ,and the Death Squads all are great places to build from.

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    Posted 7 months ago

    wow.. that’s all I can say..This was..amazing.. can’t wait for a sequel!
    LoA

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    Tad Winslow's Buddy Icon Tad Winslow

    Posted 7 months ago

    I like your Walter Icon. The description of the man in the picture was perfect.

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