The Gray and the Blue: Stovohobo Inspired; Tale of the Civil War

by SKermitgorf

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I woke up in a rowboat with a makeshift sail stitched of gray uniform fabric. The Major is unconscious. The Captain is dead. The war is over, but tell that to the Yankee’s that are still takin shots at us from the other side of the Salkehatchie River.
The Major got shot in the leg just below the knee and the Captain got hit in the head. I am as yet unscathed.

The battle that brung us to this rickety rowboat lasted bout an hour, our men showed great coolness and courage under fire.
Our troops withstood a barrage of enemy fire and we fled the CSS Virginia as quick as possible.

I write this message to you good Sir, in fervent hope that I may deliver it to you by my own hand. But if this letter should get to you by other means, know that I died in duty to my beloved Confederacy.

They fire upon us still, I lie low under the shade of Capt. Sheldrake’s uniform, as the damn Yankees keep firing upon us. I shall fear not for God is with me.

Truly your brother,
Corporal Otis C. Riverdale

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  1. The Gray and the Blue: Stovohobo Inspired; Tale of the Civil War

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great story idea, and I like the character. Your tenses wound up a little confusing, I think cause of the source material conflicting with your letter idea (future vs. present vs. past). But still quite a neat scene to picture.
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    Freedom's Buddy Icon Freedom

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    great job. i like how you painted out the scene.

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    Freedom's Buddy Icon Freedom

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    great job. i like how you painted out the scene.

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    Freedom's Buddy Icon Freedom

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    great job. i like how you painted out the scene.

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    Freedom's Buddy Icon Freedom

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    great job. i like how you painted out the scene.

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    Freedom's Buddy Icon Freedom

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    sry I clicked it too many times lol I love the story though really, that’s how much I love it…how many times I posted a comment lol great job.

  7. The Gray and the Blue: Stovohobo Inspired; Tale of the Civil War

    artistsrunwild's Buddy Icon artistsrunwild

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    LOL at the number of comments Freedom posted.

    I love the way you use words like brung and takin’, it allows us to see this character more clearly. I agree with THX though about the tenses but it would be hard to work it all in and you did it in a way that still makes sense so well done. :)

  8. The Gray and the Blue: Stovohobo Inspired; Tale of the Civil War

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 7 months ago

    thanks for the input about tense, I think I fixed it.

  9. The Gray and the Blue: Stovohobo Inspired; Tale of the Civil War

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great job! I like the use of southern speak. Makes it more real for folks like me. We talk like that, a lot. Too much. Good thing there’s back space. ;)

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    artistsrunwild's Buddy Icon artistsrunwild

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Much much better. It flows better and the sign off is nicer! Love it :)

  11. The Gray and the Blue: Stovohobo Inspired; Tale of the Civil War

    Lone Writer's Buddy Icon Lone Writer

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Congrats on being featured Kermit!
    Very nice!
    :D

  12. The Gray and the Blue: Stovohobo Inspired; Tale of the Civil War

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 7 months ago

    Congratulations on being featured, also. Your characters are memorable and the dialect is great! I had to comment, even though I think you know that this is good. :)

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    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Can’t remember how the tenses were, but it seems to work now, like he’s reviewing a few things for the reader and then switching to the present tense as he writes. And so nice that is flows so well now that it’s featured and all.
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    Dr. Mousse's Buddy Icon Dr. Mousse

    Posted 7 months ago

    wow. this is really great. congrats on being featured!

  15. The Gray and the Blue: Stovohobo Inspired; Tale of the Civil War

    Music-Hearted's Buddy Icon Music-Hearted

    Posted 7 months ago

    Congrats on being featured! I like this, it seems to work quite well.

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    Posted 7 months ago

    Congrats on being featured! And nice story too. I like how it’s a letter!
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    Posted 7 months ago

    brillliant…just brilliant

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