Dude, Where's My Car? Oh, That's Right, My Psycho Girlfriend Has It

by Stovohobo

The girl huffed in frustration as her regular phone rang, interrupting the conversation on the first one. The first phone that only had one private line.

“Okay, mom, I’m coming.” She hung up and returned it back to its secret pocket inside her jacket, then flipped open the second phone.

“Hello?” she growled through gritted teeth, hands white-knuckled on the Jeep’s steering wheel, jostling around as the vehicle rumbled through the dense foliage.

“What—what are you doing?” Haley’s voice crackled through the receiver, full of frustrated bewilderment and bordering craze.

“I can’t explain,” she yelled back. “It’s complicated!”

A few lost, dry breaths on the other end, as if he was trying to find words. She took a breath.

“Haley, listen to me. My name’s not Violet Williams. It’s Winter Shields, and I’m an agent-in-training for the criminal organization Lá Pretni. My mom’s a top agent there, and she’s been trying to get to your dad. Interpol, right?”

”...Um.”

“Yeah, um.”

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  1. Dude, Where's My Car? Oh, That's Right, My Psycho Girlfriend Has It

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    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    wow. Both of these were good. I seriously was not expecting this from the title! Nice job.
    LoA

  2. Dude, Where's My Car? Oh, That's Right, My Psycho Girlfriend Has It

    Storykeeper of Fae's Buddy Icon Storykeeper of Fae

    Posted 8 months ago

    Whoa! That was a shocker! I just thought she was a cheater. So she really does love him? Well that’s good. I like it!

    LoA

  3. Dude, Where's My Car? Oh, That's Right, My Psycho Girlfriend Has It

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    Posted 8 months ago

    Intrigue, plot twist, awesome LoA

  4. Dude, Where's My Car? Oh, That's Right, My Psycho Girlfriend Has It

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    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    LOL !
    The plot thickens…

  5. Dude, Where's My Car? Oh, That's Right, My Psycho Girlfriend Has It

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    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    you come up with the most strangest names.
    Violet Williams?
    Winter Shields?
    hahaha.

  6. Dude, Where's My Car? Oh, That's Right, My Psycho Girlfriend Has It

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love how Violet Williams sounds as though it were her true name and Winter Shields makes more sense as the false name, but it’s reversed…just one of the clever things that makes this story work. Keep it going!

  7. Dude, Where's My Car? Oh, That's Right, My Psycho Girlfriend Has It

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    Posted 8 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Lovely cadence to it all, a real sense of urgency. Must admit I wasn’t sure what’s going on. Is Haley the person to whom the Jeep belongs? I suppose I should read on to find out.

    LoA

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