Just Another Dirty Word (Fracture's Prequel Challenge)

by Nouvelle Bardot

Esu, I thought, silently laughing to myself. So dirty. Everything sounds dirty backwards. I continued to munch rather ferociously on the burnt toast that lay before me, crumbs circling the outer edges of the plate, butter dripping quite steadily from my greasy breakfast fingers.

I continued to stare at the sign while i stabbed at what was left of my eggs over easy. I had been on the road for some time now, and every one of these greasy spoon roadside diners were all the same. They all had that damned hand-painted sign on the window: Please Use Front Door. Like they’re so worried I’m going to come in through the back door. To be honest, my coming in the back door might just be a favour to them.

The waitress came by and filled my coffee without asking. Her rather rotund behind making the seams of her cheeky yellow uniform scream.

“Hey,” I warned her.

“Scuse me?” she drawled lazily.

“That coffee was perfect. I had the right balance of cream, sugar and now you’ve twharted my perfect creation.”

Comments

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  1. Just Another Dirty Word (Fracture's Prequel Challenge)

    uselessness' Buddy Icon uselessness

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love it. Great descriptions, very evocative! I added a prequel to begin to hint at who our protagonist is and what exactly he or she is doing here…
    LoA

  2. Just Another Dirty Word (Fracture's Prequel Challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 8 months ago

    Nice, easy flowing description of a simple little moment giving a few clues as to larger events and a bit of the character’s personality.
    Loa

  3. Just Another Dirty Word (Fracture's Prequel Challenge)

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Descriptive, witty &love the coffee cream scene and the greasy breakfast,you catured a diner scene so perfectly, just like the coffee before the rotund butted waitress went and ruined it.
    LoA

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