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Candle Burning Bright

by Blusparrow

I stood, crying and holding a candle. I held my candle outward more, thinking since I was crying so hard I may put out the fire. People were also standing with candles. There were friends, family, school mates, teachers, and people I didn’t even know all standing in silence. Some whimpering some looking down, praying. Pictures of the people to be remembered lay in lines. Some stood certain, one was the most important of all.

This was not supposed to happen. To much happened all at once and sometimes I wonder if things could be different. What if they were still here? Would I have changed the way I did? Was this fate and meant to happen? To find out we need to go back to when it all started. Hi, my name is Summer and this is my story.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Candle Burning Bright

    NightMaiden's Buddy Icon NightMaiden

    Posted 9 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    sounds promising. sequel, please? ^^

  2. Candle Burning Bright

    NightMaiden's Buddy Icon NightMaiden

    Posted 9 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    very well written. i like how you don’t explain right away.

  3. Candle Burning Bright

    Tad Winslow's Buddy Icon Tad Winslow

    Posted 9 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    The setup here is one that deals with time, going back and forth, which is a great way to structure a story. I want to read more, even though it seems to end in tragedy I’m hoping there’s some sunshine in store too. Good start.

  4. Candle Burning Bright

    flute faerie's Buddy Icon flute faerie

    Posted 9 months ago

    I like how you set it up and don’t end it right away. nice job!

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