Something There

by emma jo_234

“Grandma said the big oak was around here somewhere,” pouted Lissy, her little face sticky with popsicle juice.

Erin grinned up at the sky and turned to Anna. “Pretty place, huh?”

Anna flicked a few strands of sweaty hair out of her face. “It’s alright, if you like nature,” she replied loftily.

Anna didn’t like nature. She hated it. She hated the creepy bugs and the itchy plants. She loathed her grandmother’s house and acres of land. What she wouldn’t give to be back in New York City, or to at least have access to the Internet.

“Hey,” Erin said suddenly, “I think I found something.”

Anna laughed coldly. “Sure, Erin. Right.”

“No, really,” Erin protested. She darted forward, running as though trying to escape the clutches of a madman.

Anna and little Lissy stared.

“Erin?”

Their cousin didn’t look back, and they had no choice but to follow her.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Something There

    A Cerebral Mosh's Buddy Icon A Cerebral Mosh

    Posted 6 months ago

    Good stuff! I’m impressed that you’re only 13 and writing this level of story. Keep going with it.

  2. Something There

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 6 months ago

    Nice creative jump from the picture, and I like the image of the city girls reluctantly exploring the area with the local cousin.
    LoA

  3. Something There

    Fantasy's Buddy Icon Fantasy

    Posted 6 months ago

    awesome so far!! i’m gonna keep reading!

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    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    well developed characters.
    LoA

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