The Burning Metal

by NightMaiden

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“Give me those,” an eager female student bustled forward.
“I wouldn’t advise you to do that,” Aphra fixed her gaze on the girl.
“Why, afraid I would damage your poor swords?” the girl sneered.
“No,” Aphra smiled. “They have enough will to protect themselves.”
The girl was unsure of what that meant, so she went ahead and picked up the swords anyway.
“Aaah!” the girl wailed and she dropped the sword instantly. She cradled her hand, which was badly scalded and bleeding.
“My swords react to other people’s flesh,” Aphra picked up her sword and sheathed it. “They burn any other skin that touches them.”
“You could have told me that before I picked it up,” the girl whined, tears squeezing out of her eyes.
“I did tell you; You decided to try and take something that wasn’t yours,” Aphra locked stares with the girl.
The student looked away from Aphra’s amber eyes, and went back to crying over her damaged hand.

“Hmph,” Aphra strode off. “Sensei, I’m practicing in the forest.”

And with that, she walked off.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

  1. The Burning Metal

    Tears of Phoenix's Buddy Icon Tears of Phoenix

    Posted 7 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I have to be honest, I’ve read the whole series so far, and I’m not feeling it yet. She has shown up at a dojo, refers to the sensei as, well, a sensei, but has shown no indication of what she intends to learn. In fact, she seems to be far outclassing everyone there, so I’m not really seeing why she’s there in the first place. It just seems a little disjointed to me. I like where it could head, so 4 stars and a watch.

  2. The Burning Metal

    NightMaiden's Buddy Icon NightMaiden

    Posted 7 months ago

    Yep, that’s the point; She is outclassing everyone there and the only reason she was at the dojo is because her foster family kicked her out. The dojo is just an excuse for her to be away from home.

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    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 7 months ago

    She sure does outcalls the rest.

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