Trapped like a zebra. (Is that even an expression?)

by invisibility_disability

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“Oh my God!” I yelled. I tried to run to Aibfinnia in the cramped space, but it was too late. The stones had already covered most of her legs.
“Rainn…” she said right before she passed out from the pain.
“Oh no,” I whispered to myself. “No… no… no, no, no, no, no, no no no no no no no no!” Why did the rocks fall? And why in the world did they all miss me, but hit her?
I didn’t even get a chance to tell her…
I climbed over to the large pile of rocks and tried to pull her out, but the boulders were too heavy. I attempted to slide my card to open the door, but they were malfunctioning from the weight of the stones. I rammed my fist against the doors and screamed, praying that Olivia or Viridiana would hear me.
Even if they do hear me, how are they supposed to get in? I’m the only one with the access card…
Oh well, there’s no harm in trying, especially in a dire situation.
Then I heard a voice outside the door.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Trapped like a zebra. (Is that even an expression?)

    Blossom Ruoqen's Buddy Icon Blossom Ruoqen

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    your story is wonderfully descriptive, and, you have nice comma usage (hooraw!). Nice job writing suspense :D broad grin

  2. Trapped like a zebra. (Is that even an expression?)

    invisibility_disability's Buddy Icon invisibility_disability

    Posted 4 months ago

    thanks, blossom. :)
    and i just wanted to say to everybody reading this…
    yes, i know that the narrator is no longer aibfinnia. i decided that since she is unconscious at this point and hereby a prop, i should offer a different perspective of the story. so until she wakes up, you’ll get the other passengers’ points of view. :)

  3. Trapped like a zebra. (Is that even an expression?)

    Disturbed Youth's Buddy Icon Disturbed Youth

    Posted 4 months ago

    Poor Abbi! Dang Rainn can’t you keep your woman concious for a least a minute?

  4. Trapped like a zebra. (Is that even an expression?)

    paper flowers' Buddy Icon paper flowers

    Posted 4 months ago

    ooo, suspenseful! ;-)
    LoA

  5. Trapped like a zebra. (Is that even an expression?)

    .:band baby:.'s Buddy Icon .:band baby:.

    Posted 3 months ago

    wow, i wanna know what he had to say! and why none of the rocks hit him! and why won’t his card work.. and who’s voice! ah the suspense!!
    LoA

    oh, nice job =)

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