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Can't Forgive, but I Miss You

Good grief, you used to have so much fun. The world was nothing but a series of jungle gyms and obstacle courses for your amusement. Oblivious sure, but you ran all day and laughed the whole way. Being friends was as simple as living on the same street and wanting to play. Finding adventure was as easy as walking outside and turning on your imagination.

Then something changed. Interactions became laden with imperceptible messages. There was suddenly a right way and a wrong way to be. Running around like a lunatic, though still fun, was no longer acceptable. And what did you do?

You ran away, hid in a quiet corner of your mind. Why did you do that? You could have conquered the world, slain the dragons, and made everything right! Somewhere along the line, you left off really being there, content to observe from the shadows, safe in anonymity.

People come and go. I grant them their journey and hold no grudge when our paths diverge. There’s only one person I won’t forgive for leaving. I miss me.

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Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
Trying to Blend
Posted 7 months ago

I like this…kept me guessing right ‘til the end. Nice fic.
Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
Adam Croft
Posted 7 months ago

Wow – I didn’t see where that was going! Excellent ending.
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Apostrophe
Posted 7 months ago

Woah total surprise with the ending.. well written.. very Engaging. you manged to keep it in the present too.. awesome this should win the challenge definately!
Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
Blusparrow
Posted 7 months ago

I love it! it is about growing old and loosing your innocence and care free feeling. I feel myself loosing it too. I bring it back though because it is fun and makes me feel alive.
Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
Louise Madison
Posted 7 months ago

Perfectly describes growing up. Very much a suprise ending
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xxcatiexcatxx
Posted 7 months ago

It’s going to be hard to pick a winner.. i like this.
Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
xxcatiexcatxx
Posted 7 months ago

this is so true, and well written with very good metaohors.
LoA
Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
Blossom Ruoqen
Posted 7 months ago

wonderful job. It’s a good thing you won’t have to look too far to find you! : ) your still in there..somewhere. meanwhile, I’ve got shovels!!
Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
YodaOnCrack
Posted 7 months ago

Thoughtful, insightful, sensitive and engaging – the kind of qualities I’ve come to expect from your writing. Nice work! I like the end.
Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
Katherine Lenado
Posted 7 months ago

I love love love the ending. keep writing. and keep me updated with sequels.
Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
thebetweenspace
Posted 7 months ago

favorite line: “running around like a lunatic, though still fun, was no longer acceptable.”
Can't Forgive, but I Miss You
leala1953
Posted 7 months ago

I don’t know what to make of this…I don’t believe you missed you. I think this is written for someone else you are pining for….and if it is, it’s very romantic and beautiful. I mean, in your fouth paragraph there is that implication, when you wrote “when our paths diverge” . Please, write a sequel to this so I can see the light somehow…i’m slow.
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emma jo_234
Posted 7 months ago

Nah, leala1953, I think it’s quite possible that this was written with THX speaking about himself. Or to himself.
I’m only thirteen but I’ve felt like this frequently. You really captured the feeling. Beautifully written.
LoA
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Storykeeper of Fae
Posted 7 months ago

I love this! Missing a part of yourself, feeling like you’re lost. So easy to relate to, and a beautiful take on the challenge.
LoA