Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

by Jenunique

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John kicked the body with his cowboy boot, “Another one bites the dust.” He spit a chaw that sizzled in the hot Arizona sand.

Chet looked at him and stare back down at the mutilated body splayed before them, “That’s what I like about you, John.” He squatted beside the corpse. Rummaging in the pockets and pulling out the folding money and bag of gold coins.

Chet stood and walked over to John, handing him the folding money while he shoved the coins deep in his own pocket, muttering,”Got brass in pocket. I’m special.“

John grabbed Chet and whirled him around. The noon heat fanning the flames of tempers rising. Though John smiled when he said, “Now Chet, Don’t do me like that. Do you really want to hurt me?“

Chet shrugged out of John’s grip and laughed. He climbed onto his horse and whistled sharply. John stood looking at him befuddled, “Is there something I should know?“

Chet called out, “Over here, Major Tom, the mass murderer John Black. You’ll find the folded money on his person.”

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 3 months ago

    Okay I couldn’t stand it. I had to do it now. And I may do another…. ;) And uh… I kinda put more than 4 in. :/

  2. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Cool western and you just couldn/t stick to 4 could ya lol.. you must love the 80’s music. Glad to see your back.. haven’t seen any of you or your mom & son’s writings in a bit.
    keep up the alwaying interesting work, in diffent genre’s I like your story telling style.

  3. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 3 months ago

    I actually have a t-shirt that states “Product of the 80’s” I wear it proudly… every chance I get. ;)

  4. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I like it, a western infused with a li’l bit of the 80s.

  5. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    Melia's Buddy Icon Melia

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    If I keep reading these I’m going to have to make a mix CD with all the awesome tunes. Great, gritty western Jenunique! I loved it.
    LoA

  6. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    .:band baby:.'s Buddy Icon .:band baby:.

    Posted 3 months ago

    very nice, i liked this one =) ((not that i know the songs.. but still!))
    LoA

  7. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Yay, The Clash!!! Some great songs used here, too.
    LoA

  8. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Anything that starts with Queen has to be good. And this was! Brutal but brilliant twist at the end, framing a guy and pocketing some profit in the process. Too slick.
    LoA

  9. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    ChrisWDP's Buddy Icon ChrisWDP

    Posted 3 months ago

    That was a great story and great use of songs.

  10. Should I Stay or Should I Go... Capital W's Retro Music Challenge

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I stole your character for a sequel to mine! Heehee, story #24509

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