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"Hello, Private Eyes"{80's Retro Music Challenge}

“Hello”, I said, “Private Eyes, what can I do ya for?”

“All I need is a miracle”, said a distressed female voice on the other end of the line.

“Nothing like putting me under pressure,” I said.

“You don’t understand, I hurt so bad, I think my husband is cheating on me with high priced call girls,” she sniffled.

“Is he a politician?,” I asked sarcasticaly.

“I thougth he was a goody two shoes when we met. I loved him heart and soul for twenty years. My family hated him, we had no money in the beginning, but against all odds, we made it work. Sometimes just living on a prayer,” the woman said, clearly devastated at this turn of events.

I’ll look into it Ma’am,” I said and took down her info.

“Call me when you catch the slime ball in the act.

I promised that I would. I hated cases like this. Cheaters. Think they are smooth operators. But if this is it, the only case I got, then so be it. I’d go at it with gusto.

First I’d pour myself a whiskey and feel wonderful tonight.

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"Hello, Private Eyes"{80's Retro Music Challenge}
SKermitgorf
Posted 4 months ago

Uh oh.. unlucky 13 songs…
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Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)
Posted 4 months ago

Yeah, but great choices for songs! :D Very amusing.
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Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)
Posted 4 months ago

Great. Now I have Hall & Oates going through my head (not that that’s a bad thing…). :D
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Apostrophe
Posted 4 months ago

good choices, i like how you got them to neatly fit into the story. And it’s not cheezy like some. It flows natrually.
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OrangeOreos
Posted 4 months ago

That was great!

The song titles fit in perfectly.

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Blusparrow
Posted 4 months ago

I like it a lot! wow! that was way better than what I entered! 6, yes 6, stars!
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Ana Cristina
Posted 4 months ago

I love how seamlessly the song titles fit into your narrative. Great job.
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THX 0477
Posted 4 months ago

Friggin’ over achiever. The challenge clearly said 4 songs. I don’t think I should be penalized for following the rules. Seriously, fun stuff, great job fitting it into the pulp fiction detective novel genre. It all worked really well.
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thebetweenspace
Posted 4 months ago

Seamless integration of the songs. Nice choices, as well. Private Eyes, Against All Odds/Living on a Prayer.
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.:band baby:.
Posted 4 months ago

very nice. they fit well. =) even if I don’t know the songs. hehe.
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Jenunique
Posted 4 months ago

Aha! I am not the only one who can’t follow rules around here! ;) Perfect! I love it! The more the merrier!
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judee4u2
Posted 4 months ago

Great story but my favorite part is the question “Is he a politician?” That one really made me laugh!!!