Remember Me, I Pray

by THX 0477

I think I’m going to be sick. I try to go on, stumbling and fumbling for my way. Every joint feels twice its size and aches to be moved, as if my whole body may at any moment revolt and cease to follow my desperate instructions.

The stairs come too fast, and the slick railing evades my attempts at a firm grasp. Am I going down or trying to climb up? Why won’t my head some pounding? I stop two steps into another flight among the endless flights to let my stomach expel a small quantity of acrid air, burning my nostrils with the smell of curdled milk and something earthy. I don’t even know what I ate, but if it tasted anything like that I’m glad I don’t remember eating it.

Four more steps, and before I know it I’m sitting down, back against the wall, staring back up the spiral of railings. Something is wrong. So many things are wrong. I am wrong. All that is left is to take this picture, so that you may remember me. And now I will sing a prayer for these walls and my g-d to hear before I die.

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  1. Remember Me, I Pray

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    You’ve woven an incredible tale from such an enigmatic photograph. I really got a sense of who this man was, so much so that I felt grief and overwhelming sympathy for his predicament by the last sentence (which is possibly the most powerful line you’ve ever written).
    LoA

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     Kermitgorf's Buddy Icon Kermitgorf

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    that’s deep.. very different from your humor ficlets.. very impressive.

  3. Remember Me, I Pray

    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted about 1 month ago

    Very nice unique, psychological look at what’s going on in this picture – but then, that would make some sense.

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