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Cindy Lou Dresses for Success

“All right, you can look now.”

Cindy Lou had dressed herself in the clothes from the bed. Of the clothes I’d bought, she’d picked a denim skirt and a fuzzy pink sweater. They suited her. She’d even managed to fix her hair and put on light makeup somehow.

She stood about 5’6” in her bare feet. (I’d forgotten to buy shoes.) Her eyes were bright blue in a heart-shaped face, her hair blonde and a little longer than shoulder length. She had full lips, which were smiling at me, and dimples, which were showing now. “You’re right, that is better,” she said.

I had to agree, though I’d probably trip over my tongue if I tried to say so. Instead, I said, “How long will you be safe to stay out?”

“Oh, about a day or so. Why?”

“Can you, uh, still…eat and drink stuff?”

“I’m still normal when I’m like this, yes,” she said. Then she grinned. “Oh ho. Can it be that, even after having me inside your body for a month, you’re having a hard time working up to ask me out?”

I had to admit, she had me dead to rights.

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Cindy Lou Dresses for Success
Lone Writer
Posted 6 months ago

Agh! This is so strange! But I’m hooked, please continue!
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J.B. Williams
Posted 6 months ago

She’s a little sharper than I thought.
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Ana Cristina
Posted 6 months ago

I agree with Lone Writer, this is bizarre but I am compelled to keep reading.
One thing bothered me here: where the heck is Cindy Lou going to get makeup? Now, I know the theme of the story is crazy, but that doesn’t mean that it can’t have its own logic to it. Better to write that your narrator had bought some makeup along with the clothes.
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Ridcully Calvert
Posted 6 months ago

I liked the detail about forgetting to buy shoes, yet he remembered to get make-up

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Throat Wolf
Posted 6 months ago

Did he? ;)
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Ana Cristina
Posted 6 months ago

Well, you specifically write that he bought her clothes, and that she “put on light makeup somehow,” so the connotation here is that she produces this makeup seemingly out of nowhere. As I wrote before, I recognize this is fantastical, but you still need to maintain a logic inherent to the narrative.
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Throat Wolf
Posted 6 months ago

Well, the mystery about it is actually intentional. When you get right down to it, I don’t say where the comb came from either. :) It’s meant to be puzzling, she’s supposed to have a touch of mystery about her.

(I originally had “he had no idea where she’d gotten them” or words to that effect in there to make it more explicit, but they had to go for the sake of the word count. Maybe they shouldn’t have.)
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Blusparrow
Posted 6 months ago

This is so weird, he is dating someone that lives inside him… yet I want to read the sequel!
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Throat Wolf
Posted 6 months ago

Yep. Many guys only date someone that sticks out of them. He’s just gone a step further. :)
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Throat Wolf
Posted 6 months ago

(Not that I’ve ever actually come out and said whether the protagonist is male or female, however…)
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Ana Cristina
Posted 6 months ago

Oh my god, I’m convinced now it’s a female. That would make the make-up and comb seem more plausible…

This changes everything!

:D
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Throat Wolf
Posted 6 months ago

Well, I’ll tell you. I’ve left it neutral this far just so people would have an easier time identifying with the character, just like in choose your own adventure books. (And also, once I get in a habit, I find myself loath to break it. I’m funny that way.)

To my mind he is male, but if someone else wants to imagine herself as the protagonist, she can be my guest. :)
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Nissakit
Posted 6 months ago

wow, this girl is smart….. keep going….
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flute faerie
Posted 6 months ago

Oh dear, I’m praying it’s a guy. I don’t think this series can handle another weird twist lol.
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Flute Loop<33
Posted 6 months ago

I totally agree with flute faerie on this one….
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Alexa ♥
Posted 6 months ago

I’ve reconsidered. Cindy Lou would make a great girlfriend. She knows your narrator inside & out.
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i live NYLSC
Posted 6 months ago

speechless…... again…....