Memory (uselessness's living descriptions challenge)

by .:band baby:.

Dust covered the wood floor. Empty, discarded papers lay scattered around the room. Boxes where piled in a corner, gathering dirt and grim as the years accumulated.

A rat scurried out from under an old, abandoned box. It ran to the middle of the room and paused, nose up in the air to sniff, before scurring away again.

The many lights in the room had long since burnt out, but some light was let in threw a broken window. The other windows were boarded up, but this one had been opened by a girl many years ago.

She visited often for awhile, bringing life into the otherwise stale room. She would sit in the corner and draw. Sometimes she would talk to the rats or other critters that had taken up residency in the vacant ballroom.

But, she had grown and left the ballroom to a distant memory. It had once been beautiful, with masked men and women in beautiful gowns. They would swirl and laugh and have a good time.

Now, the balls were a memory for the old room just as the little girl was only a memory.

Comments

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  1. Memory (uselessness's living descriptions challenge)

    .:band baby:.'s Buddy Icon .:band baby:.

    Posted 7 months ago

    Not sure if this is really good or not.. I tried to check my grammer..

  2. Memory (uselessness's living descriptions challenge)

    Blusparrow's Buddy Icon Blusparrow

    Posted 7 months ago

    It is good! Really good. Awesome job!
    LoA

  3. Memory (uselessness's living descriptions challenge)

    Flute Loop<33's Buddy Icon Flute Loop<33

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    you have an extra c in since just thought you might want to know…
    other then that it was amazing!
    LoA
    ((So i was commenting you on myspace and i almost put LoA after my comment… haha whoops =]))

  4. Memory (uselessness's living descriptions challenge)

    Apostrophe 's Buddy Icon Apostrophe

    Posted 7 months ago

    beautiful story.. could potentially make someone misty eyed.. rich in symbolism.. useless should be proud of the responses to his/her challenge is generating.

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