Of Battles Won and Lost

by THX 0477

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A war of epic proportions erupted within my mind, blurring my senses. Lust made a bold, burning charge for the center. Guilt made a stinging flanking maneuver. Doubt and reality wrestled with senses and preconceived notions. Lust doubled back to kick me in the gut.

“What’s your name?” I asked. It seemed a fair question considering what I had in mind.

Her eyes said I don’t know, but her mouth said, “I’m who you want me to be.”

The contradiction was all but lost as the war raged. My face felt warm. I had to shift positions.

“Where are you from?”

Her eyes said Not here, but her mouth cooed, “Your dreams.”

My body tingled. Reason left me with only the simplest of faculties. Her tail swished gracefully behind her, and the battle was lost and won in that small moment.

I whispered across suddenly dry lips, “Come closer.”

From there and for the next month I was lost to the world, my soul sold for the prize in the gem. It was beyond my dreams and surpassed expectation. And boy was I going to pay.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Of Battles Won and Lost

    Robotech_Master's Buddy Icon Robotech_Master

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    It’s all right, I forgive you for not reading my mind. I’m sure you’ll do better next time. :)

    Seriously, it wasn’t meant as a complaint, or at least it shouldn’t have been, just an observation. In retrospect, I think it’s a fairly common problem some people (including me) have in writing or in roleplaying, which is to say unconsciously thinking ahead as to what should happen even if we don’t intend to have such plans

  2. Of Battles Won and Lost

    Robotech_Master's Buddy Icon Robotech_Master

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Then when someone else responds in a way other than we expect, it causes cognitive dissonance. This is part of why I wish there were more ficlet sequels; I think it does me good to have it stomped into my head that other people aren’t going to read my mind and write what I would. This is why I’ve pledged to at least try to sequel stuff that doesn’t go how I expect/want, rather than just ignore it and write something better. If I want total control, I should write the damned thing myself.

  3. Of Battles Won and Lost

    Yeah Write!'s Buddy Icon Yeah Write!

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    well, I read this before I read the prequels but I shall give my opinion anyway. clears throat I loved this ficlet! I didn’t understand the tail thing but I probably should have read the prequel…. Also, I think it works well with the prequel.
    ~
    Confession: one time someone sequelled my story and I just ignored it because I didn’t like it… I feel all bad now

  4. Of Battles Won and Lost

    Valley Fey/Pinprick's Buddy Icon Valley Fey/Pinprick

    Posted 6 months ago

    The first paragraph of this made my day.

    Absolutely amazing writing, I love it. It flows so well, and is so descriptive, while also being completely funny, and a little sad. Very real.
    LoA

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