Dead in my Chest

by Artist_Girl

When Mariel was born, I had reached the happiest moment in my life. That little face looking up at me, the hand squeezing my fingers. I couldn’t imagine anything better. Jake was home from his last tour of Hawaii and we had our daughter.
Mariel was the best daughter anyone could ask for. She didn’t cry or scream, but would just calmly sit in her crib. She became a daddy’s girl almost instantly. He was the one to share his love of the water. The moment she could walk, he had her in the backyard pool. She was swimming by the age of five.
She loved to be taken to the beach to watch her daddy surf. Jake would let her sit on the board as he paddled aimlessly around the water. She adored him, and wanted to be just like him.
When he came home telling of a surfing contest coming to town, Mariel was more excited then I. For some reason, my heart felt dead in my chest.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

  1. Dead in my Chest

    Contour's Buddy Icon Contour

    Posted 3 months ago

    Hm…I wonder whats going to happen next. Very good grammar. Didn’t see anything wrong here.

  2. Dead in my Chest

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 3 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Very ominous feel for such cheery subject matter. Downright unsettling.

  3. Dead in my Chest

    flute faerie's Buddy Icon flute faerie

    Posted 3 months ago

    Uh-uh. I hope she’s alright!

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