Terminal Behavior

by Wallace-E

>> What is that? Do you smell that? Is someone eating in line?
>> No; it’s that woman with the green suitcase. She’s got a jar of mango body butter, it looks like. Probably just figured out she can’t take it on the plane. She’ll have to give it up at the gate.
>> So, what, is she using the whole pot up right now? That’s gonna be a very fragrant aircraft.
>> I don’t see how . . . Oh. Well, would you look at that! That’s a good idea.
>> What?
>> She’s sharing it with people in line. She knows she can’t keep it, so she just used a little and now she’s passing it around.
>> How nice, I suppose. That explains the fruit salad. This whole terminal is turning into an enormous human smoothie.
>> Ugh. Well, that’s an unpleasant image. Oh, look! Can I try some? Over here! Please!
>> Hey, wait a . . .
>> Thank you! Ooh, this feels good. Smell?
>> Thanks, but I’ve had a pretty good whiff already.
>> Mmm. Hey, I wonder if I’ve got anything to share . . . Oh, look at that. Um, does anybody need some contact lens solution?

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 3.5 stars out of 5

  1. Terminal Behavior

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 6 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Funny back and forth, and even without descriptors I felt it was clear enough to be two distinct characters having a conversation. Cute story idea too.
    Loa

  2. Terminal Behavior

    [pens&feathers]'s Buddy Icon [pens&feathers]

    Posted 6 months ago

    Hahaha. You’ve got to love airports. This made me smile. :]

  3. Terminal Behavior

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    Posted 6 months ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    Scents are very evocative in fiction and in life and add an important element to any reader. Your ficlet was about a scent but should also be a reminder that good writing engages all the senses.

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