Confessions

by Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)

“Forgive me, father, for I have sinned.”

There was something odd about the voice. Almost as though the speaker was trying to keep from laughing as he said it. “How long has it been…”

“Oh, I’ve never been in a confessional, father.” He paused. “Actually, I don’t think I’ve ever actually set foot in a church, Catholic or otherwise.”

“Well, then,” the priest replied, “you probably have a lot you wish to get off your chest.”

“Oh, you have no idea, father.” And he began listing his sins.

In detail.

The priest sat there, horrified by what he heard. If even half of what was said was true…

Finally, the priest had enough. “My son,” he exclaimed, “if you truly wish to repent your sins, I think you should go to the police, first…”

Finally, he laughed. “Father, I don’t wish to repent. I wish to brag! Besides, what could the police do? All God could do was cast me out of Heaven!”

The priest froze. No! he thought.

“Let me start again, so you’ll understand.

“Fear me, father, for I am sin!”

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

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    Melia's Buddy Icon Melia

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Nice twist! Thought this was excellent – great foreshadowing at the beginning leading up to an exciting twist. I love ficlets that can tell a whole story in such a limited space and you pulled it off well!

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    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted 3 months ago

    This is brilliant, absolutely brilliant. I agree with Melia, the foreshadowing is great. And the last line really pulls the whole thing together, without revealing too much. Sequel coming up?

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    Blusparrow's Buddy Icon Blusparrow

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    WOW ! Cool! The twist was a very nice touch, exspecially the ending.
    LoA

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    flute faerie's Buddy Icon flute faerie

    Posted 3 months ago

    Whoa, awesome concept. The last line was sorta like the icing on the cake.

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    Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)'s Buddy Icon Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)

    Posted 3 months ago

    I had a stray thought about what Satan would do if he went into a confessional. Would he go there to confess or to gloat? The last line was actually the first line I wrote. I just knew I wanted to end it on that note.

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    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    The idea of satan in a confessional is fantastic! I can’t help but fear for the priest …

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    Ridcully Calvert's Buddy Icon Ridcully Calvert

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great concept, and your dialogue is superb.

    LoA

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