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Define "Wrong"

by Saint Chuck

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Define "Wrong"

    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted 7 months ago

    Not my best, but it fits to the challenge.

  2. Define "Wrong"

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I thought it fit really well and even had a great set-up for that last line. I liked it, a little moment of clarity in the confusion that is adolescence…and written from the female point of view no less!
    LoA

  3. Define "Wrong"

    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted 7 months ago

    Well the female perspective isn’t all that hard for me ;)

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    Crown Me Tarzan, King of Mars' Buddy Icon Crown Me Tarzan, King of Mars

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Yeah, THX , Chuck’s a girl; didn’t you know that? : )
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    Excellent work. I agree with everything that THX said above. Great dialog; these days, if someone writes witty teenage dialog well, they get compared to Joss Whedon. For the sake of originality, I won’t do that.
    I will say that I loved almost every line, except for the You know what, just stop before this goes any further… paragraph. Something about it falls flat compared to the rest; I don’t know why.
    But as a whole, it is very, very good.

  5. Define "Wrong"

    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted 7 months ago

    Hmm I’ll see what I can do about that line, thanks.

  6. Define "Wrong"

    Angelwingstofly's Buddy Icon Angelwingstofly

    Posted 7 months ago

    Good ficlet, I think everyone has been there at one time or another. My favorite part is the title, however, because who can really define what is right and what is wrong??

  7. Define "Wrong"

    Mr Reeses 's Buddy Icon Mr Reeses

    Posted 7 months ago

    good ficlet, I liked it overall!!

  8. Define "Wrong"

    JMBauhaus' Buddy Icon JMBauhaus

    Posted 7 months ago

    I like the double entendre of the title. What’s the “wrong” here? Is it sex in the school bathroom, or the guy’s not taking no? It works for both. Good job.

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