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Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]

Eric waved to his diving partner, pointing in the direction of the underwater cave. His partner, Lazaro Bravo, was twenty meters downstream, carried by a current that Eric would use to glide in slowly behind.

In the distance Lazaro’s light flickered out. Eric touched the button on his transducer, his voice crackling into an electric wave. “Lazaro? Where’s your light?”

“¡Dios mío!” he answered. “Won’t believe it, muchacho. Won’t need light here. Is amazing!”

The current accelerated. At first it was dark – a dull mixture of rocks and sand, but then the siphon pulled him down deep into a light brighter than the mid-day sun.

He got his bearings and looked around for Lazaro who waved in slow motion. “¡Aqui esta!”

Eric put his hand over his eyes, shielding them from the light below. Above him the cave’s mouth was twisted into an evil grin. To each side were boundless silver sands cascading against luminous fields of crystalline stalagmites.

“Amazing!” Lazaro said.

“Yes,” Eric said, “but how do we get out?”

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Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
Lone Writer
Posted 6 months ago

Wow. I really like this and hope you write a sequel!
LoA
Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
flute faerie
Posted 6 months ago

Wow, sounds like a beautiful cave. I like all your colorful descriptions, and how you added a problem at the end. Oh, and another thing: I wrote a poem once and named it underwater world. It’s a good title ;p
Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
THX 0477
Posted 6 months ago

Fascinating and magical with just a hint of, “Oops, we may have goofed a bit.”
LoA
Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
Blusparrow
Posted 6 months ago

Nice discription! Colors! hehe!
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Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
Mistress Elsha Hawk
Posted 6 months ago

Very cool, a fabulous description and a nice plot twist!
Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
.:band baby:.
Posted 6 months ago

Totally agree with every thing above. =) Very good descritptions.
LoA
Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
Capital "W" Writer (LoA's Geekus Awesomeus)
Posted 6 months ago

Nice. Very nice. Love the descriptions!
LoA
Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
howhardlifeis♥
Posted 6 months ago

Really good descriptions!
Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
Apostrophe
Posted 6 months ago

I like how you managed to fit in a little Espanol. Nice touch.. Good descriptoins, per the challenge. Nice Job. Muy bien!!
Underwater World: Eaten Alive [Living descriptions challenge]
thebetweenspace
Posted 5 months ago

Excellent story, greatly described. I loved the line the cave’s mouth was twisted in an evil grin.