You Kidding Me?

by Nissakit

See that’s exactly why we are breaking up! She’s way too clingy and obsessed with my overall life! Hey, I know, I am going to ask Alex out to the Spring Fling next week! She go with me for sure.
“Hey Alex, I have to ask you a question.” I paused. “Next week is the Spring Fling and I was wondering if you don’t already have a date, maybe you could go with me?”
She hadn’t said anything for two seconds but it felt like a lifetime. I could feel my face getting hot and my back getting all sweaty.
“Of course, I’ll go with you. I’ll meet you in the front of the school at 7:45. See you then!” She walked away.
She was so amazing. I can’t wait for next Thursday. I wonder if Chloe got a date. Probably not!
I started walking outside, we had football practice and it started in 5 minutes. Hey, who was that blonde talking to Adrian. Oh no! You’ve got to be kidding me, Chloe? No way!

Comments

  1. You Kidding Me?

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 26 days ago

    Not a bad job of getting across a combination of stream-of-consciousness and story points. Dialog is a little stiff though.
    LoA

  2. You Kidding Me?

    Nissakit's Buddy Icon Nissakit

    Posted 26 days ago

    I tried editing it, but I really don’t know what “my dialogue is stiff though” means. Any ideas?

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