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Janie, Janie (This is Just to Say)

She flipped the tape over to the B-side. There was a static hiccup, then:

This is just to say…

Well. I guess I don’t really know what this is just to say. (Nervous laughter.)

Janie, you were always the one with the words, really. You knew how to say the things that were so hard to feel, never mind describe. I just… I feel like I let you down, Janie. (Choking up.) But it’s so much more than that, I guess.

I don’t know. I don’t know anymore.

What I do know is that I miss you. I miss the way you could fill up a room with your personality. I miss the sound of your voice. Almost like music, you know?

(Crying.)

I miss you. I miss your paint and your poems. But mostly I just miss you.

I guess I’m sorry that it has to be this way. If you’re listening to this, I’m already dead. If you’re listening to this, Janie, you have to know that this wasn’t your fault. None of this was your fault.

This is just to say I’m sorry.

Goodbye, Janie. I love you.

Static. Silence.

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Janie, Janie (This is Just to Say)
Ana Cristina
Posted 3 months ago

I am completely covered in goosebumps. The end line, with the static and then that chilling, final silence, did me in.
There are no words for this. Except for, maybe, amazing. Your writing keeps getting better and better, pens.
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[ wall.doll ]
Posted 3 months ago

Wow. This definitely struck some emotional chords. You certainly have a knack for tapping into such raw feelings.

5 stars all the way!
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thebetweenspace
Posted 3 months ago

Hauntingly beautiful. If I could give ten stars I would. Wow.
Janie, Janie (This is Just to Say)
J.B. Williams
Posted 3 months ago

I thought that it was a tape about someone professing their love for someone else. Talk about a plot twist…
Janie, Janie (This is Just to Say)
someday_93
Posted 3 months ago

oh wow…oh wow
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Valley Fey/Pinprick
Posted 3 months ago

I almost cried reading this, it is so powerful. I love the line, “I miss your paint and your poems”, I don’t know why… but it made me feel so melancholy.
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OrangeOreos
Posted 3 months ago

This is crazy good!

It jsut seems that there was so much more to this tape that we don’t know….

Definitely an awesome ficlet!!!!

And saying awesome is saying something!!!!

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Mistress Elsha Hawk
Posted 3 months ago

Love the recorded aspect! Its a nice spin on this challenge.
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You Know You Love Mee!
Posted 2 months ago

omg….
tears
great story… you were voted
“The story that needs to be read at this exact moment”
or something else like that…
by Ana Christina in the final judgement thingy.
Whooo hoo.
I totally agree with her, along with every other person who read this ficlet.
:]]
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thebetweenspace
Posted 2 months ago

Congrats on being crowned champion of the challenge! I said it before and I’ll say it again. This deserves 10 or more stars!
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wytherwings
Posted 2 months ago

wow… amazing
and congrats!!
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Misheru O'ku
Posted 2 months ago

this haunting apology has stayed with me all day. Congrats!
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[ wall.doll ]
Posted 2 months ago

You definitely deserved the award for this. Even as I read it for about, I don’t know, the fifth or sixth time, it makes my eyes water. Bravo.
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○○♥Promises Broken & Backs Turned♥○○
Posted 2 months ago

You really do deserve it. It really gave me chills. There’s so much question left behind it. This is an extraordinary ficlet that makes you want everybody to read it.
Janie, Janie (This is Just to Say)
Six Feet Under The Stars
Posted about 1 month ago

did u get the idea from a book? because something happened almost exactly like this in a book. cant exactly remember what it was called though.
Janie, Janie (This is Just to Say)
Six Feet Under The Stars
Posted about 1 month ago

did u get the idea from a book? because something happened almost exactly like this in a book. cant exactly remember what it was called though.
Janie, Janie (This is Just to Say)
Six Feet Under The Stars
Posted about 1 month ago

did u get the idea from a book? because something happened almost exactly like this in a book. cant exactly remember what it was called though.
Janie, Janie (This is Just to Say)
Six Feet Under The Stars
Posted about 1 month ago

did u get the idea from a book? because something happened almost exactly like this in a book. cant exactly remember what it was called though.
Janie, Janie (This is Just to Say)
Six Feet Under The Stars
Posted about 1 month ago

did u get the idea from a book? because something happened almost exactly like this in a book. cant exactly remember what it was called though.
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[pens&feathers]
Posted about 1 month ago

No, this idea came from a story I was going to write once. The original idea was that it would develop into a ghost story, but I never really got around to writing it, so it’d been floating around in my head for a while and I figured I could change the original idea to fit this challenge.